11-14-2012, 05:42 PM
Nice... I like that that you ventured into a more philosophical take on love, beyond the romantic part. Starting from a religious reference, then an alchemical one (related to science / philosophy), then socio-political; it all ties into mankind's universal search for perfection and truth. In that respect, i have a differing opinion from the others, I'm afraid 
. I thought your final couplet was the weakest one; the two lines for me don't complement one another, and idea-wise they brought the least to the poem. Just my take on it, though.
. I thought your final couplet was the weakest one; the two lines for me don't complement one another, and idea-wise they brought the least to the poem. Just my take on it, though.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?