11-08-2012, 10:05 AM
the almanac gives it a feel of back to the future, which fits in with the time travel theme.
the first verse feels better.
is the 'to' needed on line 2 of the 2nd verse?
appendage feels a bit vague, do you mean 'cock'?
all in all it's a decent edit for me.
the first verse feels better.
is the 'to' needed on line 2 of the 2nd verse?
appendage feels a bit vague, do you mean 'cock'?
all in all it's a decent edit for me.