11-06-2012, 10:43 AM
it's why god gave women knees 
now i see the third edit, i'm torn as to if i were right or wrong in my suggestion concerning the 1st and 2nd stanza.
i think the title's okay as far as the poem goes, i was just thinking which stanza would made it give more of a contribution.
as a matter of fact my love making often left women in an hypnotic state
i never thought about it till now but i think (adult content) takes something away. deprives the reader of reaching their own orga conclusion. while, it's adult, it isn't filthy adult.
now i see the third edit, i'm torn as to if i were right or wrong in my suggestion concerning the 1st and 2nd stanza.
i think the title's okay as far as the poem goes, i was just thinking which stanza would made it give more of a contribution.
as a matter of fact my love making often left women in an hypnotic state
i never thought about it till now but i think (adult content) takes something away. deprives the reader of reaching their own orga conclusion. while, it's adult, it isn't filthy adult.