Hypnotic

[Todd]

I'm not even sure how to start with this one Aish. Adult content...yep. These are the poems you spend time with, and the writer ends up screaming no, no, no it's a metaphor for doing the laundry. Assuming that's not the case, here goes:

Hypnotic-- great title that also serves as a sort of first line. I sort of connected this with magnetized later. We have a sense of the lulling of the will, the lowering of inhibitions.

like
the navel
of the sea--probably misinterpreting but I'm seeing this as purely physical and sensual. I get an eastern feel to it all and a sea has a sense of a life spring. I'm free associating now.

your tongue
slips and skips,

salmonswimming--love this. It really adds to the slips and skips image. It makes the tounge like something that has its own volition.
upstream
as it scribes
liquid aums--upstream is a good directional word in establishing the act taking place. The scribing of liquid aums...eastern, religious, act of worship, overlaying the specific act taking place. Like upstream it describes a particular motion and rhythm.

in
the magnetized silk
of my vagina ---magnetized silk is evocative as hell, and I like that you didn't layer the image but got direct.
before you
crucify me,--an interesting way to imply being nailed.

nailing my palms--because of that colloquial attachment to crucify you may not need this line
to undulant dissolution

galaxies
pouring
from my mouth.--stunning last lines

I've never posted anything on this theme here, but I can tell you that I'm positive that I wouldn't pull it off a quarter as well as you did here. This read was like clutching fire. Very nice Aish.

Best,

Todd