working the bar.

[rowens]

I'm still letting others do the hard work with this one. I'm in a carrion mood so far this week. 'Prettifying' might need the uppercase 'P'. And there's some punctuation that might be used to guide the weightier lines. I like the detail; for me, though, lots of adjectives feel tricky. But as you probably know about me, I tend to leave things unbalanced and cross the subtle line. I don't feel that here, because the subject is kind of subtle, despite the attention to detail and imagery. I think the lack of punctuation leaves it a bit troubling. The possessive 'evening's' needs that ' too.