As the Day

[Aish]

Ed Gein was a serial killer who made things like lamp shades from his victims skin.

CREEPY

I love the idea of paradise in the flesh.

This is a stark opposite to the idea of embracing Divinity through sex, which rings true in a concrete, physical need to grab the blood and dirt of human experience, bury in deep, and look at the waiting oblivion with resolute disdain.

S2L5 could be restructured to something more along the lines of "but darkness is necessary to see". The futility is palpable.

Age craving youth is about as real as it gets. The first time I read through I couldn't help thinking of Ed Gein.

I'm just happy nobody said it was creepy yet. To me it has that creepy, bitter essence to it when I read it, none of which were there when writing.

It could definitely do with a trim and tightening up. Thanks for the insightful comment, Aish.