The Moment of Impact.

[SpoiledInk]

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had a feel of rap to it and because of this the repetition of collide/s, i think the clichés also just pull through because of the style. simply because it has no chorus or refrain, i'd like to see it extended

thanks for the read and hi

Hello! Thank you so much for the feedback! I don't know whether to leave it like this or to find some way to end it. I kind of feel like it isn't exactly finished. I've come to a block though.
Thanks again