As the Day

As the Day

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Are you alluding to me?

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09-28-2012, 05:56 PM

in the reply you say stealing her youth, i.e. taking her virginity or essence and that would be much clearer as to what the guy wanted. from borrowing i got an idea of him seeing through her eyes. it's why i presumed daughter. i get what you're saying about being agnostic but the read doesn't or didn't suggest the fact to me. for instance you don't know i'm 5 ft 8 inches tall or that i'm a non believing Christian. Smile

thanks for taking the feedback without gutting me Big Grin

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As the Day - by MrA - 09-28-2012, 02:13 PM

RE: As the Day - by just mercedes - 09-28-2012, 03:53 PM

RE: As the Day - by MrA - 09-28-2012, 05:03 PM

RE: As the Day - by billy - 09-28-2012, 04:19 PM

RE: As the Day - by billy - 09-28-2012, 05:56 PM

RE: As the Day - by MrA - 09-28-2012, 06:01 PM

RE: As the Day - by billy - 09-29-2012, 07:15 AM

RE: As the Day - by addy - 09-29-2012, 08:49 AM

RE: As the Day - by MrA - 09-29-2012, 05:52 PM

RE: As the Day - by Aish - 09-30-2012, 02:57 AM

RE: As the Day - by MrA - 09-30-2012, 07:48 PM

RE: As the Day - by billy - 09-30-2012, 09:09 AM

RE: As the Day - by Todd - 09-30-2012, 10:32 PM

RE: As the Day - by MrA - 10-06-2012, 07:01 AM

RE: As the Day - by Aish - 09-30-2012, 11:28 PM

RE: As the Day - by MrA - 10-01-2012, 02:46 AM

RE: As the Day - by Todd - 10-01-2012, 07:00 AM

RE: As the Day - by Aish - 10-06-2012, 03:22 AM

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