09-28-2012, 05:03 PM
Originally it was "should it be" but it clashed with "because". I meant hand; suggesting to take maybe. Thank you for your feedback, just mercedes.
Well, Billy the God thing wasn't actually aiming at a God but more of a person who would be deemed as one. I'm agnostic so there's never any substance when I mention God or religions. They just intrigue me I suppose.
The poem is about an old(er) man(the narrator) and a young girl who he wants to 'sleep with' and in doing so stealing her youth and innocence and restoring some feeling of youth in himself. As he definitely isn't enjoying getting old.
Hope that's a bit more clearer, I'm often too cryptic I think. Thanks for the feedback, Billy.
(sorry about the reply form. still getting the hang of this place)
Well, Billy the God thing wasn't actually aiming at a God but more of a person who would be deemed as one. I'm agnostic so there's never any substance when I mention God or religions. They just intrigue me I suppose.
The poem is about an old(er) man(the narrator) and a young girl who he wants to 'sleep with' and in doing so stealing her youth and innocence and restoring some feeling of youth in himself. As he definitely isn't enjoying getting old.
Hope that's a bit more clearer, I'm often too cryptic I think. Thanks for the feedback, Billy.
(sorry about the reply form. still getting the hang of this place)