Gravity

[Aish]

Attraction is
a provability
the tether
the strange force at a distance
that holds all together
as it falls disparate
and tangent
to the ground
to the moon
to the sun. I would pare out and re-work this strophe into a stand alone piece. It has everything it needs to be a successfully bittersweet construct without losing momentum if you craft it properly.
 
Strangely attracted children
hear and infer
the ice cream truck
by its song and its route
because Get rid of this entire strophe to this point.
space is curved
by desire. This is beautiful, and makes a good opener for another piece.
 
We sit at the edge
of a tree line
within the faint arc of porch light
watching cold blacknight warped
into warm galactic flows. Your verb tenses change. I wouldn't use any of this set up. The next line fits better with your curved desire.
Though we each began as separate stars
our paths at last approached and circled
as they have since countless times
and yet they never wed.
 
I have known you
since you were lightning and I the air you parted,
since we were water and the wind drew us in,
since you were sunlight and I sealed in amber,
you were jasmine and I the fallen dew.
We teased, we courted, we played unhurried.
We seeped among the leaves.
We rose to our adjacent clouds.
We lay in wait in the abyssal hills.  
We died and bloomed and crystallized
but were always released anew from the fire.
 
I cannot watch you pass again this time
cannot release you back to the flow that washed us
finally here
cannot stay silent, cannot stop shaking, cannot find words or thoughts for anyone but you and yet you make it clear
I cannot have you.
You have no memory of this passionate force
that binds me
close but never reaching.
My petitions carry no such weight
in your center
trapped here by the burden
of my own gravity. I think if you excise the excessive verbage and transitions
  , this content all works.
Though worlds may pass
and new be built ten thousand times
before we get this chance again
each alive with voice and passion,
still you and I will rise from here
and as I’ve always known
you’ll return to that perpetual path
 
out
away from my side.





I've never been satisfied with the fourth stanza of this and meant to rework it. Would like some input, but get the feeling that where it should be strongest it is the weakest.

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A more effective ending IMO would be
"Though worlds may pass
you and I will rise
and you will return
to the eliptical plane
away from my side.

Happy to see you here, Steve! Welcome!