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False Advertising
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08-18-2012, 09:48 AM
Clever little read. I agree about sprucing up the meter. Also, I'm struggling with how the last line connects to the rest of the poem... that final sentiment doesn't seem relevant to the rest of the ideas before it. That's just my observation though
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
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