Neutrino Man ( a resubmission)

[billy]

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Like quantum time, I find that I exist etherealy.
My motions, though Newtonian, are steps I take most serially. these 1st two end rhymes set me a problem linguistically
Gravity, that occult force, which shall not ever be defined
is constant in my universe and by its cage I am confined,
and by its nature I am blind,
and by its laws constrained.

If from that cold yet black-hot seed, from whence all things sprang forth and far, some nice effin f's
was I born there, in matter new, to be full formed, a mortal star? is this a statement or a question?
Then time and light and space took hold, perversely making laws obscure.
Esoteric truths were plucked from randomness, all strangely sure
that for eternity endure
until no longer true.

A fleeting thought, anthropic yet, cannot outpace the light I see.
But for one tick of quantum time, that which will be, will surely be;
and that which, though with faith and hope, will not transpire if destined no.
For nought can change the way things are, and none are wise enough to know
A second hence in time’s sure flow
Until forever dead.

Tectak
2011

possibly a little wordy in the 1st verse, but that's your style and i've come, in some respect to like or endure it i didn't mention all the lines i enjoyed because there were many. but i'd love to have the other versions on the same page so as to not make an idiot of my self by saying the opposite of what i said those last times .

i think your longer line length is growing on me, a problem i have though is that the longer the line the less likely i am of spotting lumps in the meter. but isn't that a good thing you'll say and i have to answer yes.

i like how science was woven with fate and failure. though will we, forever be dead? a line i thought ended the poem well,

thanks for the read