07-31-2012, 07:33 AM
(07-31-2012, 05:51 AM)raymond trevitt Wrote: I wonder if what you've written counts as poetry or some stream of conscious rant (I wonder this about the few attempts at poetry writing I have tried as well). I think it goes back and forth from serious thoughts to humorous thoughts in a way that suggests you did not have a handle on what exactly it was you were trying to say, which I then think it what your intent was all along. OK so this is but my second attempt to offer critique of someone else's work which may only be 'shite' (my critique) and I do not know if this is the type of input people are looking for.Don't spend time on it, ray. It is pure nonsense with absolutely no message at all....and that is the point. When we cannot tell if a piece is profound or pointless it is time to reconsider values. Believe me....this whole piece is just words strung together in a way that somtimes seems to make sense. You can get the same effect by writing words on bits of paper then tossing them in the air. Left where they fall then read out in sequence you will always get something that the crits will read sense in to. I used to find this worrying....now it just amuses me but not enough to comment upon.
Best,
tectak