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07-30-2012, 04:35 PM
Broken you say, bloodied gestures, stumped on boned and ragged pins;
severing like buddhists banjos,lying splattered in dusted places. YOU!
Concept cold, concept hot...busted brakes by standing hard and then. ME!
The fractured marrow pours and percolates down through tweeded valleys green
with the algae, rained in oil; Haematoccocus pluvialis, lipsticked like a jewish girl,
shoots a nation through the cross of hairs and leave denial the other choice.
What do you want that blows and billows to be noticed, fanned and FUCKED
starved and stuffed, boiled and pickled in madeira's finest: are WE there?
tectak
2012
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well that's me fucked 
i want desperately to understand it because there's glimpses of something radical
the last line feels so iconic as to make me think it's from a film. i know there was a dc comic starman but this can't be he.
i did notice the film thingy (which played no part in my icon assumption) it reminds me of jack nickleson portrayal of an officer in a film about code red or something...i'm rambling like a schoolgirl in a hockey meet aren't i 
it's an original if that helps ...
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(07-30-2012, 06:17 PM)billy Wrote: well that's me fucked
i want desperately to understand it because there's glimpses of something radical
the last line feels so iconic as to make me think it's from a film. i know there was a dc comic starman but this can't be he.
i did notice the film thingy (which played no part in my icon assumption) it reminds me of jack nickleson portrayal of an officer in a film about code red or something...i'm rambling like a schoolgirl in a hockey meet aren't i
it's an original if that helps ...
Just beautiful, billy. You make me glad to be alive. Starman? Wasn't that a Bowie in the 70's......who the hell knows. I may have made it all up and really I am still back in the sixties dreaming of now and wondering why it all went right. Or not. See the next exciting episode as a spoiler.
Best but cynical,
tectak
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ziggy stardust, and spiders from mars.
starman and the man who fell to earth,
i once got to talk to bowie back stage at a concert.
he was one of fave my stars, close up he looked
like a twat (in one of his costumes and make up)
fess up, is it really about him? 
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(07-31-2012, 09:23 AM)billy Wrote: ziggy stardust, and spiders from mars.
starman and the man who fell to earth,
i once got to talk to bowie back stage at a concert.
he was one of fave my stars, close up he looked
like a twat (in one of his costumes and make up)
fess up, is it really about him?
Nay, NAY! A thousand times, NAY!
Best,
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i think as an exercise it worked. you say...it's not poetry but think about it. the purpose of it was gleaned by some.
it's like the soup can art of the poetry world. you're a fucking creative genius (i might not be joking)
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hey tec
(07-30-2012, 04:35 PM)tectak Wrote: Broken you say, bloodied gestures, stumped on boned and ragged pins;
severing like buddhists banjos,lying splattered in dusted places. YOU!
Concept cold, concept hot...busted brakes by standing hard and then. ME!
The fractured marrow pours and percolates down through tweeded valleys green
with the algae, rained in oil; Haematoccocus pluvialis, lipsticked like a jewish girl,
shoots a nation through the cross of hairs and leave denial the other choice.
What do you want that blows and billows to be noticed, fanned and FUCKED
starved and stuffed, boiled and pickled in madeira's finest: are WE there?
tectak
2012
i'm at a loss of what to say, to be honest, and i apologize for it. the parts that stand out to me the most are the "pins", because it is a word that can have so many different interpretations, and the "shoots a nation" (i'm seeing drugs being taken on a hairy arm). no idea lasts long enough for me to hold on to it, making it difficult for me to interpret. the sounds of the words are strong, but i'm not sure how i feel about the acoustics much either
Written only for you to consider.
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(08-03-2012, 08:46 AM)Philatone Wrote: hey tec
(07-30-2012, 04:35 PM)tectak Wrote: Broken you say, bloodied gestures, stumped on boned and ragged pins;
severing like buddhists banjos,lying splattered in dusted places. YOU!
Concept cold, concept hot...busted brakes by standing hard and then. ME!
The fractured marrow pours and percolates down through tweeded valleys green
with the algae, rained in oil; Haematoccocus pluvialis, lipsticked like a jewish girl,
shoots a nation through the cross of hairs and leave denial the other choice.
What do you want that blows and billows to be noticed, fanned and FUCKED
starved and stuffed, boiled and pickled in madeira's finest: are WE there?
tectak
2012 Hi phil,
Read on. The cat is out of the bag........but the bag was always empty
i'm at a loss of what to say, to be honest, and i apologize for it. the parts that stand out to me the most are the "pins", because it is a word that can have so many different interpretations, and the "shoots a nation" (i'm seeing drugs being taken on a hairy arm). no idea lasts long enough for me to hold on to it, making it difficult for me to interpret. the sounds of the words are strong, but i'm not sure how i feel about the acoustics much either
(08-03-2012, 08:46 AM)Philatone Wrote: hey tec
(07-30-2012, 04:35 PM)tectak Wrote: Broken you say, bloodied gestures, stumped on boned and ragged pins;
severing like buddhists banjos,lying splattered in dusted places. YOU!
Concept cold, concept hot...busted brakes by standing hard and then. ME!
The fractured marrow pours and percolates down through tweeded valleys green
with the algae, rained in oil; Haematoccocus pluvialis, lipsticked like a jewish girl,
shoots a nation through the cross of hairs and leave denial the other choice.
What do you want that blows and billows to be noticed, fanned and FUCKED
starved and stuffed, boiled and pickled in madeira's finest: are WE there?
tectak
2012 Hi phil,
Read on. The cat is out of the bag........but the bag was always empty
i'm at a loss of what to say, to be honest, and i apologize for it. the parts that stand out to me the most are the "pins", because it is a word that can have so many different interpretations, and the "shoots a nation" (i'm seeing drugs being taken on a hairy arm). no idea lasts long enough for me to hold on to it, making it difficult for me to interpret. the sounds of the words are strong, but i'm not sure how i feel about the acoustics much either
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