07-26-2012, 05:22 PM
Thanks all.
Tom -
"picky but "in time all" is not reconcilable with "yet not until"
when the date is in the distant past "
I don't agree. Given how long insanity has been around, 2oo years ago is not the distant past. It's actually quite late in the day. That's what I mean.
I think I've been picked up before on "combinations of it". The "it" is madness. Can you suffer combinations of madness? I'm not even convincing myself here!What about "a combination of it"?
The rhythm is consistent - for me - until the "populates the globe" line. There ought to be a line break there, at least. For me, the change in rhythm is not that big an issue.
Parakleseos - it's interesting what you say about performance. I do "perform" now and again, not this one though.I think maybe I write my humorous poems with an audience in mind.
Billy - the hundred to seven isn't arbitrary. Mankind has increased from one billion to seven billion, mental disorders from 4 to 400+ - 100-7. The relevance of the last line is that the narrator has just realised that his own contorted rationalisations constitute a new mental disorder.
Is there a rhyme scheme? Well, there are rhymes throughout, but they aren't appearing in a regular fashion, if you get what I mean.
"PS. You will note that I avoid trochee-spondee-iamb-anapest talk."
That's just as well, Tom, as I wouldn't have a clue what you're on about anyway!
Tom -
"picky but "in time all" is not reconcilable with "yet not until"
when the date is in the distant past "
I don't agree. Given how long insanity has been around, 2oo years ago is not the distant past. It's actually quite late in the day. That's what I mean.
I think I've been picked up before on "combinations of it". The "it" is madness. Can you suffer combinations of madness? I'm not even convincing myself here!What about "a combination of it"?
The rhythm is consistent - for me - until the "populates the globe" line. There ought to be a line break there, at least. For me, the change in rhythm is not that big an issue.
Parakleseos - it's interesting what you say about performance. I do "perform" now and again, not this one though.I think maybe I write my humorous poems with an audience in mind.
Billy - the hundred to seven isn't arbitrary. Mankind has increased from one billion to seven billion, mental disorders from 4 to 400+ - 100-7. The relevance of the last line is that the narrator has just realised that his own contorted rationalisations constitute a new mental disorder.
Is there a rhyme scheme? Well, there are rhymes throughout, but they aren't appearing in a regular fashion, if you get what I mean.
"PS. You will note that I avoid trochee-spondee-iamb-anapest talk."
That's just as well, Tom, as I wouldn't have a clue what you're on about anyway!
Before criticising a person, try walking a mile in their shoes. Then when you do criticise them, you're a mile away.....and you have their shoes.