Fauxku Choo Choo (the play's the thing)
pink and green bungalows
one by one re-sided neutral
turning summer to winter

summer's greens have faded now,
fallen leaves litter the driveway
as the bungalow hunches for winter
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summer's greens have faded now,
fallen leaves litter the driveway
as the bungalow hunches for winter

Refugees are traded now
in the latest Brussels giveaway  
as European pipedreams splinter
~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe
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Refugees are traded now
in the latest Brussels giveaway
as European pipedreams splinter

yams and brussels sprouts
give way to spring pea leaves
digging deep
for a splinter of joy
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yams and brussels sprouts
give way to spring pea leaves
digging deep
for a splinter of joy

on the other side of the equator
the final tomatoes hide behind leaves
faded now, like a splinter of spring
digging into autumn
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on the other side of the equator
the final tomatoes hide behind leaves
faded now, like a splinter of spring
digging into autumn

On the other hand in Ecuador
a backpacker's sued Phil Grieves
of Kentucky, Appalachian coal king
for pinching her bottom
~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe
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(05-05-2016, 08:43 AM)Achebe Wrote:  on the other side of the equator
the final tomatoes hide behind leaves
faded now, like a splinter of spring
digging into autumn

Holidaying in Ecuador
a backpacker sues Phil Grieves
of Kentucky, Appalachian coal king
for pinching her bottom


I'm really struggling to find the three words from the first stanza reused or repurposed in the second. Am I just being very dense?
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(05-05-2016, 08:45 AM)just mercedes Wrote:  
(05-05-2016, 08:43 AM)Achebe Wrote:  on the other side of the equator
the final tomatoes hide behind leaves
faded now, like a splinter of spring
digging into autumn

Holidaying in Ecuador
a backpacker sues Phil Grieves
of Kentucky, Appalachian coal king
for pinching her bottom


I'm really struggling to find the three words from the first stanza reused or repurposed in the second. Am I just being very dense?

I changed it as you were reading.
~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe
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On the other hand in Ecuador
a backpacker's sued Phil Grieves
of Kentucky, Appalachian coal king
for pinching her bottom

In Ecuador
backpackers perform
equatorial egg tricks
for a bemused king
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house for sale:
sea view, missing one wall -
still a good buy


prisoners penned
by three walls, the sea;
low tide:
the moon's pardon
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prisoners penned
by three walls, the sea;
low tide:
the moon's pardon

Prisoners mooning
over barbed wire-
no pardon for those sad sacks
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris
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Prisoners mooning
over barbed wire-
no pardon for those sad sacks

Wires plucked blue
under a shared moon
seeya next life
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Wires plucked blue
under a shared moon
seeya next life

moonshining hobo
plucks the blues
on a bruised guitar
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(love)
moonshining hobo
plucks the blues
on a bruised guitar

shining evening rays
fragmented through clouds
parting is not sweet sorrow
Hobe Sound sings
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shining evening rays
fragmented through clouds
parting is not sweet sorrow
Hobe Sound sings

noctilucent lampposts—
fragmented rays
on the canal
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noctilucent lampposts—
fragmented rays
on the canal

unsalted, silted
dark passage, dirty bottom
crab heaven
It could be worse
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Bottom feeders
In up-lit cracks.
Soft shelled crabs
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Bottom feeders
In up-lit cracks.
Soft shelled crabs

up-lit cracks
leg-wrapped poles
dead eyes
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up-lit cracks
leg-wrapped poles
dead eyes

litcrackup—
on a polar axis
eccentric orbits
   —TulipCrack
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litcrackup—
on a polar axis
eccentric orbits
—TulipCrack

someone lit the tulip
in my crack
probably the eccentric Polack
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someone lit the tulip
in my crack
probably the eccentric Polack

lips cracked
by polar wind
Mawson's revenge
It could be worse
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