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jadielue Offline
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#1
05-25-2011, 10:54 AM
I hate to be a tart
but your lips are like
bitten invitations.
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billy Offline
Are you alluding to me?
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#2
05-26-2011, 10:08 AM
love it.
it's tacky without being tacky.
thanks for the read jadie.

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jadielue Offline
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#3
05-26-2011, 10:10 AM
It's love-acky. Lovely and tacky mixed with lust, but lust is only present in secret....Lol.
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#4
06-02-2011, 03:58 AM
I love the phrase "bitten invitations." This is flippant and serious all at once. Thanks for the read Jade.
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addy Offline
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#5
06-02-2011, 08:25 AM
Short and sweet this one, perfectly done Smile
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
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jadielue Offline
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#6
06-03-2011, 11:45 AM
Thank you both, very much. Big Grin
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#7
06-04-2011, 07:29 PM
Nice.
R.Y.
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