Copycats & Charlatans (with music)
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I apologize for any grammatical errors as I write my lyrics without the use of most punctuation so I'm rather rusty. Please critique/edit as you see fit!

https://soundcloud.com/zzincc/copycats-charlatans-demo


[Verse 1]
With whip-poor-wills crowning men,
as doubting Thomas loses wind;
you turn blind eyes.

[Verse 2]
In ego’s shade the grey subsists,
but id masks your myopic bliss
in black and white.

[Verse 3]
You clench your rabbit’s feet.
Fools grab gold and start to sink
with hands held high.
Smiles cut wide.

[Chorus 1]
“Here we are!”
And they bathe in praise.
“Here we are!”
As they kneel to praise.

[Verse 4]
Crocodile tears flood the roots
that tangle and form a noose;
leaves tongues tied.

[Verse 5]
You steady and find your feet.
Grab pyrite and never think
with head held high.
Smile cut wide.

[Chorus 2]
“Here I am!”
And you bathe in praise.
“Here I am!”
As you kneel to praise.

[Bridge]
All that you are
is what you say and do
along the way.

Swing with the rhythm
and sing to the hymn.
Swing to the rhythm
and learn to swim.
Swing with the rhythm
and sink with the ship.
Sway to the rhythm
and learn to swim!
Swear that you’re with Him;
enjoy your view.
Soon, you’re swimming
in deep cobalt blue.

[Chorus 3]
“Here we are!”
And you bathe in praise.
“Here we are!”
And you kneel to praise.
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(06-12-2015, 10:42 AM)Balor1712 Wrote:  I apologize for any grammatical errors as I write my lyrics without the use of most punctuation so I'm rather rusty. Please critique/edit as you see fit!

https://soundcloud.com/zzincc/copycats-charlatans-demo


[Verse 1]
With whip-poor-wills crowning men,
as doubting Thomas loses wind;
you turn blind eyes.

[Verse 2]
In ego’s shade the grey subsists,
but id masks your myopic bliss
in black and white.

[Verse 3]
You clench your rabbit’s feet.
Fools grab gold and start to sink
with hands held high.
Smiles cut wide.

[Chorus 1]
“Here we are!”
And they bathe in praise.
“Here we are!”
As they kneel to praise.

[Verse 4]
Crocodile tears flood the roots
that tangle and form a noose;
leaves tongues tied.

[Verse 5]
You steady and find your feet.
Grab pyrite and never think
with head held high.
Smile cut wide.

[Chorus 2]
“Here I am!”
And you bathe in praise.
“Here I am!”
As you kneel to praise.

[Bridge]
All that you are
is what you say and do
along the way.

Swing with the rhythm
and sing to the hymn.
Swing to the rhythm
and learn to swim.
Swing with the rhythm
and sink with the ship.
Sway to the rhythm
and learn to swim!
Swear that you’re with Him;
enjoy your view.
Soon, you’re swimming
in deep cobalt blue.

[Chorus 3]
“Here we are!”
And you bathe in praise.
“Here we are!”
And you kneel to praise.

As far as stuff posted on the internet goes, this is pretty awesome. Like seriously. People should freakin' comment.
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#3
This is very professional and excellent, you have a great singing voice and the vocal is crystal clear. Great job. Keith

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