Brony Love (a sonnet)

[ThePinsir]

This is my first time actively practicing assonance in my poetry. It's not prevalent in EVERY line, but it's something I'm trying to get better at. Also, I've been back on the MLP lately, so yeah. I wrote about ponies


O, Rarity! Your lovely hair inspires
passion, envious lust and lasting awe.
Your charm and wit forever lacking flaw -
as such, I feel the need, a keen desire:
submit unto your pure and purple fire!
A generosity the world's ne'er saw
makes everypony stop and drop their jaw
until Celestia herself admires!
That cunt called Twilight can't compare to you
and Rainbow Dash is just a jealous dyke;
that ass named Apple Jack is not as sassy
and Fluttershy is fucking stupid, too.
So carry on and keep on teasing Spike;
fuck the haters, keep on being classy!


(4 December 2013)

[Leanne]

Oh good lord, I am keeping the brony comments to myself :p

I know it's fun, but it's a sonnet, and I can't help pick sonnets apart a little bit... L3, "forever" is a bit of a filler, maybe "your charm and wit are sparkling, lacking flaw" (because cliches aren't going to hurt in a fun sonnet). L6 is awkward too -- in my accent, I'd change it to "a generosity ne'er (or not) seen before", but if you're American then that won't rhyme with jaw. Love "everypony", that's a clever little touch.

Then we have the volta, and the change in tone is perfect The sestet has many laughs in it -- and is definitely brony-worthy.