....

[billy]

autumn pears
ripe for picking
fruit dessert

[cidermaid]

Hi Billy
I liked the symmetry of this one. It felt well balanced if that is a valid term.
I have sat looking at this and re-reading it for a couple of minuites, it has an innocence and simplicity on the surface that gave me a nice picture of summer abundance harvested and ejoyed in the autumn glut, but then because it was you writing I'm afraid i then went looking for other applications.... And quickly saw one.
Something along the lines of A lovely pair, on a mature lady - ripe for picking. Fruity extras !

(I never used to think like this ...I have been corrupted or is that just re-educated )

Either read i liked this and did not have any nits.

[billy]

excellent


thanks for the feedback AJ

[Brownlie]

autumn pears
ripe for picking
fruit dessert

I think the word "fruit" could be taken as some subtle humor. I read this poem as playful and funny. Thinking of Pear and Pair could lead to some lewd suggestions as well.

[rayheinrich]

Hi Billy
I liked the symmetry of this one. It felt well balanced if that is a valid term.
I have sat looking at this and re-reading it for a couple of minuites, it has an innocence and simplicity on the surface that gave me a nice picture of summer abundance harvested and ejoyed in the autumn glut, but then because it was you writing I'm afraid i then went looking for other applications.... And quickly saw one.
Something along the lines of A lovely pair, on a mature lady - ripe for picking. Fruity extras !

(I never used to think like this ...I have been corrupted or is that just re-educated )

Either read i liked this and did not have any nits.

Yes, I liked as well.
But you! First the fire hydrant, now this: "lovely pair, on a mature lady
- ripe for picking. Fruity extras". BTW, you forgot to imply what
exactly one does with a fruit dessert...

(Unprotected sexual innuendo begats sexual innuendo.)

[cidermaid]

I don't recall the fire hydrant I think you have me confused with someone else.
In answer to your question about fruit dessert, it would of course depend on how it is to be served.
In my mind, the pears in the poem would have been poached in spiced red wine and served with a little whipped cream.

[rayheinrich]

I don't recall the fire hydrant I think you have me confused with someone else.
In answer to your question about fruit dessert, it would of course depend on how it is to be served.
In my mind, the pears in the poem would have been poached in spiced red wine and served with a little whipped cream.

Either you're talking cannibal or the entendre here just got tripled.

P.S. And yes, you're right, sorry for the confusation; unfortunately, it seems to be my forte.

[Aish]

August pears immediately made me think of a 40ish woman, but I've recently been writing of autumn in context to age, so for the moment I'm going to chalk it up to my own skewed view.
Nice to read you again.

[Volaticus]

Absolutely delicious poem! "autumn pears / ripe for picking". Lovely choice of words for making one both hungry and...

[billy]

thanks girls