Lincoln's Birthday (Revision 4)

[milo]

all i can say is "you and i remember budapest very differently"

i feel like i've just took two steps back. no matter how you write it out milo, i struggle at seeing it as it's supposed to be. i can accept i got it wrong but i can't for the life of me scan it the same way you did. seems like i have to go back to the drawing board

if the author doesn't mind I will up and audio later (I am at work now (working hard obviously)).

[billy]

i'm not sure that will work for me, it's okay, i'll spend a bit of time trying to get it right in my head and i'm beginning to take over thread thanks for er though

[svanhoeven]

if the author doesn't mind I will up and audio later (I am at work now (working hard obviously)).

I don't mind.

[wystan1000]

I really liked number two but in number three you have moved away from the emotional focus and made it more rather than less complex. Michael

[milo]

if the author doesn't mind I will up and audio later (I am at work now (working hard obviously)).

I don't mind.

[R.C. KITCHENS]

Revision three is solid. milo's reading is good too.

[svanhoeven]

I'd like to publicly express my appreciation for milo's reading. He sent me a copy, which I plan to burn to a CD and place in my box of Lincoln's things.

Thank you, milo.
Scott

P.S. Now y'all can stop calling me "svan".

[billy]

way to go svan oops sorry
way to go scott

[svanhoeven]

I've added more metrical variation (within IP compliance) and made some metrical corrections, changed some awkward and regional words, and compressed it a bit more by combining a few lines.

I do feel a little bad for revising it after milo's wonderful reading, but there were parts I had to fix.

Scott