I am an odd duck
sitting on a stagnant pond.
Mama, get the gun.

(Yesterday, 08:16 AM)BryanF Wrote:  I am an odd duck
sitting on a stagnant pond.
Mama, get the gun.

I'm not a fan of yoda speak, but it might work here.

An odd duck I am
on a stagnant pond sitting
get the gun, mama

as an aside, the 5-7-5 rule is available but largely ignored by most contemporary haiku/senryu writers.  As with most poetry, it's the message that matters, not the form.

Anyway, welcome to the Pen!  Enjoy.

Bryn