A Simple Lie

This happened just the other day
my lover lay upon the lawn
she sang a lay of lustrous prawn
that lie upon the ocean bed
then asked of lovers I have had.

I laid this lie upon her lips
"I laid the maid just for her hips
I've lain with farmers while they're reaping,
laid all seven lords 'a leaping.
Come evening time when I lie down
I'll probably lay a circus clown"

So since that day I seldom lie
with other than myself and I.

I like it, woulda maybe liked to see some leads or a loo but definitely fun

(12-31-2025, 11:41 PM)milo Wrote:  A Simple Lie

This happened just the other day
my lover lay upon the lawn
she sang a lay of lustrous prawn
that lie upon the ocean bed
then asked of lovers I have had.

I laid this lie upon her lips
"I laid the maid just for her hips
I've lain with farmers while they're reaping,
laid all seven lords 'a leaping.
Come evening time when I lie down
I'll probably lay a circus clown"

So since that day I seldom lie
with other than myself and I.

Thanks, really made me grin. Also reminded me I don't have to have something vital to say to write. Gives me hope.

Haha poem made me laugh a bit. Not much feedback other than it being a fun read

(01-11-2026, 01:23 PM)Bunx Wrote:  Haha poem made me laugh a bit. Not much feedback other than it being a fun read

Thanks, then it served its purpose, don't really need that much feedback on it, it is a variation on a poem I have written a few times about the conjugation of the word "lie"

Thanks

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(01-10-2026, 01:40 AM)wasellajam Wrote:  

(12-31-2025, 11:41 PM)milo Wrote:  A Simple Lie

This happened just the other day
my lover lay upon the lawn
she sang a lay of lustrous prawn
that lie upon the ocean bed
then asked of lovers I have had.

I laid this lie upon her lips
"I laid the maid just for her hips
I've lain with farmers while they're reaping,
laid all seven lords 'a leaping.
Come evening time when I lie down
I'll probably lay a circus clown"

So since that day I seldom lie
with other than myself and I.

Thanks, really made me grin. Also reminded me I don't have to have something vital to say to write. Gives me hope.

thanks    that really was its only purpose.  Don't worry, read enough and it will come

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(01-10-2026, 12:49 AM)CRNDLSM Wrote:  I like it, woulda maybe liked to see some leads or a loo but definitely fun

thanks for reading and commenting