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Home, after the first shower of monsoon
V1.1:
Fading petrichor
Steaming puddles
Virgin mud
Streaking brown bodies
Blazing heavens
Dazed insects
Drowsy grandfathers
Undead mosquitoes
Buttery toots
Original:
Fading petrichor
Steaming puddles
Virgin mud
Streaking brown bodies
Blazing heavens
Dazed insects
Drowsy grandfathers
Mosquito repellents
Buttery toots
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Did you mean ‘buttery toast’?
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Nope, farts.
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(12-24-2017, 02:11 AM)Radetof.Yahska Wrote: Nope, farts.
Ghee gee, i wouldn´t have realized that without explanation.
the first stanza is my favourite with petrichor and virgin mud
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You had me at ghee.
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(12-23-2017, 08:30 AM)Radetof.Yahska Wrote: Home, after the first shower of monsoon
Fading petrichor
Steaming puddles
Virgin mud
Streaking brown bodies
Blazing heavens
Dazed insects
Drowsy grandfathers
Mosquito repellants // fix the syllables here; it should be 4 in DA-dum DA-dum pattern. try 'Killed Mosquitos'
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But the mosquitoes are the opposite of dead. Even the damned repellents don't work.
Made a change.
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This poem has mosquitoes, humidity and mud. It makes me feel I need a fan to sleep, a lot of deodorants and a bunch of clean and dried clothes and blankets.
I like it. they are so tropical letters.
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loved it, i too thought you meant toast but i should have recognised you meant farts, i stroke of near genius.
and let's remember folks, this is the for fun forum. something i got a fair bit of with this pearl.
