It wasn’t the water sound,
nor the river's poetics.

It was a man—
pleased to be so
aimless.

(10-27-2017, 12:00 PM)71degrees Wrote:  It wasn’t the water sound—
it wasn’t the river either.

It was a man—
pleased to be so
aimless.

Enjoyed this 71. Excellent title. My only suggestion is to perhaps find a way of combining the first 2 lines. You could avoid a little repetition and one of the em dashes that way. 
Paul

(10-27-2017, 01:01 PM)Tiger the Lion Wrote:  

(10-27-2017, 12:00 PM)71degrees Wrote:  It wasn’t the water sound—
it wasn’t the river either.

It was a man—
pleased to be so
aimless.

Enjoyed this 71. Excellent title. My only suggestion is to perhaps find a way of combining the first 2 lines. You could avoid a little repetition and one of the em dashes that way. 
Paul

I agree. Thank you.