Senryus
#1
Friends who are engineers
tell what they know for certain
can never work.


Friends who are poets
give life its depth and grandeur ~
beware their bridges.


Friends in politics
are friendliest of all, and
might be tomorrow.
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I actually love this, duke. It's very witty and well said.

My only call out which isn't really a problem so much as just a statement of my reaction, is that the first one has an irregular syllable count and the last two are 5-7-5, which makes it seem to me like the first one was counted wrong.

Cue ray to tell me how wrong I am about all things haiku. Tongue Tongue Tongue
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(03-26-2017, 01:06 AM)Lizzie Wrote:  I actually love this, duke. It's very witty and well said.

My only call out which isn't really a problem so much as just a statement of my reaction, is that the first one has an irregular syllable count and the last two are 5-7-5, which makes it seem to me like the first one was counted wrong.

Cue ray to tell me how wrong I am about all things haiku. Tongue Tongue Tongue

You can't know less about haiku/senryu than I Big Grin .  Thanks for the comment, was feeling a little attention deficit there between ill-health and traveling.

(And also a bit irregular or just grumpy after my nephew the engineer pointed out why an idea wouldn't work Sad .)
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