Your face shouts God
my knees are owned--
I am willfully crippled

Your title - should that be 'Deity'?

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(01-21-2016, 03:55 PM)just mercedes Wrote:  Your title - should that be 'Deity'?

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of course. when intoxicated, spelling is a dull chore.   fixed.

Love songs are hard. I sing them spontaneously. And am content to be out of key.

For the first line: Is that someone shouting the word God? Or is it a face that says they are God? To me, it can be read both ways, which is generally undesirable.

Paul,

Perspective is everything isn't it?

(01-26-2016, 11:13 AM)Erthona Wrote:  Paul,

Perspective is everything isn't it?

I feel like I missed the mark with this. I had an idea but it didn't really come together. (I probably would have deleted the thread but that I am trying to be more like Ray). And yes, I am aware of your distaste for my ambiguous tendencies. You're almost always correct but it's still an element of my personal alchemy until I find my voice. If ever.

Paul

Tiger,
 
I enjoyed the poem. I think I've found myself feeling a similar way recently, its a scary feeling, but one that makes you feel alive.