hungry fish
        tasty beach crabs
        soon legs

I don't feel very evokud, but then I hate seafood.

Dale

...and yet another short form: the evoku. I am looking forward to fresh seafood. Yummy!

Ray, this did not work for me. The wording format left no "movement" in the poem.
I could not grasp where the poem wanted to take me.
The connection of the 3 lines is tenuous, I can try to work out what is going on, but when I do it does not quite add up.

Thank you. JG

(03-27-2014, 08:27 PM)John Galt Wrote:  Ray, this did not work for me. The wording format left no "movement" in the poem.
I could not grasp where the poem wanted to take me.
The connection of the 3 lines is tenuous, I can try to work out what is going on, but when I do it does not quite add up.

Thank you. JG

Fish need legs to better eat beach crabs.
OR:
An evolutionary route for fish to evolve legs is possible
because these crabs spend some of their time on land and
some in water. This means that fish that can get just a tiny
amount more out of water than the rest will get a tiny amount
more to eat. This even gradation is what makes it possible for
the process of 'natural selection' to work.

In other words, nature selects for fat fish because fat is a desirable trait! That's why fat women have so many dates, and skinny women are ignored, cause the fat women can get more crabs, and everybody wants crabs...right? That's also how long fingernails became a desirable trait. I'm still a bit unclear on the opposable thumb. It does help in masturbating, but I am unsure about how that helps to get a mate!?!?

But back to the poem. I think the key elements is "soon", as it is left undefined. On an evolutionary scale soon could be 200 million years. Plenty of time to go to the gym and pump up those pelvic fins, or legs as we humans say. But I definitely think that the word "soon" "evokes" thought, and that is what an evoku is all about, right?


Dale

(04-01-2014, 12:03 PM)Erthona Wrote:  In other words, nature selects for fat fish because fat is a desirable trait! That's why fat women have so many dates, and skinny women are ignored, cause the fat women can get more crabs, and everybody wants crabs...right? That's also how long fingernails became a desirable trait. I'm still a bit unclear on the opposable thumb. It does help in masturbating, but I am unsure about how that helps to get a mate!?!?

But back to the poem. I think the key elements is "soon", as it is left undefined. On an evolutionary scale soon could be 200 million years. Plenty of time to go to the gym and pump up those pelvic fins, or legs as we humans say. But I definitely think that the word "soon" "evokes" thought, and that is what an evoku is all about, right?

Dale

The name "natural selection" is yet another anthropological
distortion. "Nature" isn't sentient and can't "select".
It all comes down to food. Fish that starve to death can't
reproduce.

'Opposable thumbs' brings to mind a robotic hand with two thumbs.

Getting mates has something to do with quantum mechanics and gods.

And yes: 'soon' is this poem's 'red wheelbarrow'.

What evoku evokes is evolving.

"Getting mates has something to do with quantum mechanics and gods."

I guess that's why I have no problem getting mates, just keeping them.

I like to mate,
whether in a bed or on a date.
I like to mate,
Whether with my mate's mate, or my mates, mate's, mate's, mate.
Ho boy, I think it's getting late and my quantum mechanical's breaking down!

(04-04-2014, 03:45 PM)Erthona Wrote:  "Getting mates has something to do with quantum mechanics and gods."

I guess that's why I have no problem getting mates, just keeping them.

I like to mate,
whether in a bed or on a date.
I like to mate,
Whether with my mate's mate, or my mates, mate's, mate's, mate.
Ho boy, I think it's getting late and my quantum mechanical's breaking down!

mine went there too

(03-27-2014, 08:41 AM)rayheinrich Wrote:  
        hungry fish
        tasty beach crabs
        soon legs

Well done. I got two visuals right away; crab legs hanging out of the fish's mouth and the fish sprouting legs to snatch up the crab.

(06-08-2014, 10:46 AM)Markworth Wrote:  

(03-27-2014, 08:41 AM)rayheinrich Wrote:  
        hungry fish
        tasty beach crabs
        soon legs

Well done. I got two visuals right away; crab legs hanging out
of the fish's mouth and the fish sprouting legs to snatch up the crab.

Wow, you're right. These legs be crab's and fish's here!
(My subconscious will steal this.)