A warming sun returns again
It melts away the snow
The sea is freed from icy chains
Winter is letting go

What happened to Spring? Perhaps that should be your title. Snow and ice are usually gone by summer. I see winter as my season of discontent as well.

(08-22-2013, 11:45 PM)grey raven Wrote:  A warming sun returns again
It melts away the snow
The sea is freed from icy chains
Winter is letting go

Nice poem, good little rhyme to help it flow.

Very nice and simple, try and expand on it to improve your skills

I will look forward to this coming true, the simplicity carries this along very nicely and your close conjures up some fresh crisp river ice melting images. I would have a look at the title as Chris suggests.

That was a good short poem.

(08-22-2013, 11:45 PM)grey raven Wrote:  A warming sun returns again
It melts away the snow
The sea is freed from icy chains
Winter is letting go

I like the image this poem paints. I don't think "It" in L2 is needed. There's something about the last line that disturbs the flow for me. I think it's the "is letting".
Thanks for the read.

I agree, the title should be pertaining to the spring season as that is generally the season associated with change, rebirth, life and freedom. I do however see your presence of opposites and for that I can understand the title as such. I also like your use of syllables, it adds a balancing flow to the stanza.

(08-22-2013, 11:45 PM)grey raven Wrote:  A warming sun returns again
It melts away the snow
The sea is freed from icy chains
Winter is letting go

Hi grey,
This is a nice little piece of terse-verse. There not much said so not much to say. Nonetheless, picking nits is just as satisfying on a bald bonce as on a bouffant, so here goes.

"A" warming sun? The warming sun. Returning means "again".
"It" is not decisive, especially as you do not punctuate after the "again". If you wish to link L1 and L2, "it" doesn't do. Try "to melt away the snow"
As we are in polar seas here, why else would the sea freeze, I can almost, but not quite, accept the winter shift to summer rather than spring, as I imagine we are talking 6 months darkness, 6 months light. You could make more of this if I am right,or less if I am wrong.
Capitalising of line starts is old hat, no substitute for punctuation, and if you choose to abandon punctuation through choice rather than ineptitude then the practice is destructive to both flow and meaning.
Nuff' said.
Best,
tectak

As this is primarily ballad meter:

"Winter is letting go" (win-ter is) two non-accented syllables together.

better as

"Winter's letting go"

It leaves you half a foot short on the front so you could add something such as "and" to make it technically correct, however, I think it reads well without the half, as it is implied.

Dale