if you want to write haiku you should
include flowers and water and wood
contrast and compare
to twelve syllables pare
(and a third-line surprise is quite good)



And, as always, responses in the form of poems and seemingly off-topic creative ramblings
that have nothing to do with the above poem are highly encouraged.

(07-23-2013, 06:23 AM)rayheinrich Wrote:  

if you want to write haiku you should
include flowers and water and wood
contrast and compare
to twelve syllables pare
(and a third-line surprise would be good)

I don't want to write a haiku
A poem? I suppose, but too few
Words, like a song
With one verse it's not long
Enough to get more than a view

(07-23-2013, 06:36 AM)milo Wrote:  I don't want to write a haiku
A poem? I suppose, but too few
Words, like a song
With one verse it's not long
Enough to get more than a view

a 'ku with one view is quite right
when it's two juxtaposed it's delight!
poems weighted with blubber
they chew like old rubber
if they're light they endow us with flight

(07-23-2013, 07:29 AM)rayheinrich Wrote:  a 'ku with one view is quite right
when it's two juxtaposed it's delight!
poems weighted with blubber
they chew like old rubber
if they're light they endow us with flight

A Haiku? I said I won't do it!
"Oriental Mystique?" I see through it.
"profound" chopped up words
about trees, rocks and birds
pick any 10 words and "haiku it"

(07-23-2013, 07:33 AM)milo Wrote:  A Haiku? I said I won't do it!
"Oriental Mystique?" I see through it.
"profound" chopped up words
about trees, rocks and birds
pick any 10 words and "haiku it"

Ten words picked at random won't do;
any five makes a much better 'ku.
If you judge any form
by the strength of its norm;
I'll lay odds that you're fed at the zoo.


A master of haiku profound,
Needed only two verbs and a nound.
When asked how it's done,
he wrote fifty-one,
at a speed that was faster than sound.

(07-23-2013, 06:36 AM)milo Wrote:  

(07-23-2013, 06:23 AM)rayheinrich Wrote:  

if you want to write haiku you should
include flowers and water and wood
contrast and compare
to twelve syllables pare
(and a third-line surprise would be good)

I don't want to write a haiku
A poem? I suppose, but too few
Words, like a song
With one verse it's not long
Enough to get more than a view

I think that some of the best songs say very little. I have one song with one longish verse but the chorus is super simple.
"Your world is just a myth
nothing but a frown
your world is just a myth
spinning round and round"

later in the song I come to describe the girl as a conjure of my mind.

but the secret of the song lies within the chorus. 4 lines.

i dont think you need alot of words to make a song meaningful.

a song that's just one haiku long
would be fine if we all smoked a bong
sensimilla freed
on a shit load of weed
and basho would write of king kong

(08-07-2013, 09:05 PM)rayheinrich Wrote:  

(07-23-2013, 07:33 AM)milo Wrote:  A Haiku? I said I won't do it!
"Oriental Mystique?" I see through it.
"profound" chopped up words
about trees, rocks and birds
pick any 10 words and "haiku it"

Ten words picked at random won't do;
any five makes a much better 'ku.
If you judge any form
by the strength of its norm;
I'll lay odds that you're fed at the zoo.


A master of haiku profound,
Needed only two verbs and a nound.
When asked how it's done,
he wrote fifty-one,
at a speed that was faster than sound.

I am already full, sam-I-am
though I'm sure those are great eggs and ham
shill your 10-second verse
in your train thread, or worse
fill the whole forum with haiku spam.

i see milo is at it agen
he writes one in seconds, just ten
they're not called a haik-u
reptilian snake you
just sit back and pick up your zen

(08-08-2013, 11:37 AM)milo Wrote:  I am already full, sam-I-am
though I'm sure those are great eggs and ham
shill your 10-second verse
in your train thread, or worse
fill the whole forum with haiku spam.

A masterful master Ms. Ma'am,
had her heart set on green eggs and ham.
When in came a sonnet
and took a shit on it
(iambic pentameter spam).

A man who loves long words that rhyme,
great bunches that jangle and chime;
fill his head full of noise,
he can't hear the clear joys
that make pond, frog, and water sublime.