Wise words are often missed
By the poor hearing of time

I think it would be better it was more concise. with a little more clarity and detail. Abstractiond are a poets worst enemy.

Something like this:

Wise words fall on deaf ears-
Time is a poor listener.

(04-03-2013, 08:51 AM)trueenigma Wrote:  I think it would be better it was more concise. with a little more clarity and detail. Abstractiond are a poets worst enemy.

Something like this:

Wise words fall on deaf ears-
Time is a poor listener.

"deaf ears"

some would say cliches are a poets worst enemy . . .

(03-09-2013, 05:39 AM)Jae Mc Donnell Wrote:  Wise words are often missed
By the poor hearing of time

where does poetry begin as far as length is concerned, they say (whoever they are) that you can have a one word poem. i'm not so sure.


i think this is a nice little quote, but it needs a bit more for me to call it poetry jae. still, it does fit short form.

Love this message.

(04-03-2013, 08:53 AM)milo Wrote:  

(04-03-2013, 08:51 AM)trueenigma Wrote:  I think it would be better it was more concise. with a little more clarity and detail. Abstractiond are a poets worst enemy.

Something like this:

Wise words fall on deaf ears-
Time is a poor listener.

"deaf ears"

some would say cliches are a poets worst enemy . . .

Some would say "I am my own worst enemy"

(03-09-2013, 05:39 AM)Jae Mc Donnell Wrote:  Wise words are often missed
By the poor hearing of time

I like what you're telling with the poem But to me, the second line sounds a bit odd, with the words.