what we cannot see:
is consuming us daily;
we are simply blind.

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This is far too generalized for me. You could be talking about anything.

(04-03-2013, 08:55 AM)trueenigma Wrote:  This is far too generalized for me. You could be talking about anything.

I have to respectfully state that I don't understand where you are coming. I feel it poses the question that forces that are obvious are what we neglect to see because they go over our heads. We are blinded by them because we simply don't acknowledge them. There is also room for interpretation with this piece so their isn't a single meaning or message behind. That was the idea of the poem. Not to label one exact thing. I wanted it so anyone who read could define in their own way. I didn't want to be specific.

(03-29-2013, 02:23 AM)Soaring Eagle Wrote:  

what we cannot see:
is consuming us daily;
we are simply blind.

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if you want to center align a whole poem just highlight the poem and centre align once

the poem, i think it works well, because each reader will see something different in it. i think it is very ambiguous but sometimes, specially in such a short poem, ambiguity works as an extra dimension.

on a side note.

we all see different things, for some it won't work for some it will. no need to explain, agree, or disagree.

Billy thanks for your kind words. It was sweet of you to read my poem. Short poems are indeed a challenge because you have to find the right words to pack a punch.

(04-03-2013, 09:41 AM)Soaring Eagle Wrote:  

(04-03-2013, 08:55 AM)trueenigma Wrote:  This is far too generalized for me. You could be talking about anything.

I have to respectfully state that I don't understand where you are coming. I feel it poses the question that forces that are obvious are what we neglect to see because they go over our heads. We are blinded by them because we simply don't acknowledge them. There is also room for interpretation with this piece so their isn't a single meaning or message behind. That was the idea of the poem. Not to label one exact thing. I wanted it so anyone who read could define in their own way. I didn't want to be specific.

That's fine. I'm not saying it's a bad poem, it obviously accomplished what you intended. Just not my taste. As far as leaving room for interpretation, I couldn't find anything to interpret. Perhaps my imagination needs some more exercise. Anyway.. I'm sure plenty of others will enjoy it just fine.

(04-03-2013, 09:41 AM)Soaring Eagle Wrote:  

(04-03-2013, 08:55 AM)trueenigma Wrote:  This is far too generalized for me. You could be talking about anything.

I have to respectfully state that I don't understand where you are coming. I feel it poses the question that forces that are obvious are what we neglect to see because they go over our heads. We are blinded by them because we simply don't acknowledge them. There is also room for interpretation with this piece so their isn't a single meaning or message behind. That was the idea of the poem. Not to label one exact thing. I wanted it so anyone who read could define in their own way. I didn't want to be specific.

Yah, I took it literally and thought I was being eaten alive by dust mites or something. It was a scary thought. I just finished a four hour shower and now I read you were just speaking abstractly.

Yah, nothing is consuming me, enjoy being eaten by phantoms, good luck and all.