Take Good Care of Her

The tentacle wraps around your neck
it can squeeze quite hard

Chewing through the rope appendage
cut it out that hurts

Don't mind my heart, feel my hot body
it craves submission

You remind me
of masturbation

Hey Benny,
This was priceless, I think the images are great, I would of liked to have seen more detail as to what's going on. I like the images as they are but maybe more body.

"Don't mind my heart, feel my hot body/it craves submission"----a great catchy line!

I do have to say the last 2 lines were really unpredictable, I had no idea that this was where it was heading and I like the surprise. I think that was a unique comparison that I'll never forget. Bravo!

Wow! Thanks for the positive feedback.

I'll try to go into more detail in future work.

I really like the second stanza, you can feel the emotion behind it. I agree that the last two lines were unpredictable, I liked the change of pace, though it did make me giggle.

The last line made me laugh because now that my boyfriend's out of town, jilling off is all I do. (TMI? Sorry!)

The first two stanzas have me confused though. Is this just a personal quip?

(01-09-2013, 06:06 PM)newsclippings Wrote:  The last line made me laugh because now that my boyfriend's out of town, jilling off is all I do. (TMI? Sorry!)

The first two stanzas have me confused though. Is this just a personal quip?

I don't know exactly what you mean... this is a poem about killing someone with your penis.

(01-10-2013, 04:41 AM)BennyBoy Wrote:  

(01-09-2013, 06:06 PM)newsclippings Wrote:  The last line made me laugh because now that my boyfriend's out of town, jilling off is all I do. (TMI? Sorry!)

The first two stanzas have me confused though. Is this just a personal quip?

I don't know exactly what you mean... this is a poem about killing someone with your penis.

Now I'm laughing harder.

This poem is awesome and fun I like the first line a lot.