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[allykat727]

Warmth
and fire in my core,
like a machine that runs on wood.

Waves,
drowning my chest--

my heart rides on orange water.

Surges
ignite my body
and fill me up with flashes of light.

[Wratchet]

what are you representing with the poem

[Volaticus]

I like what you've written. But I'm left with an unsatisfied feeling, because I don't know why you write those things. What's the reason for those things to happen to 'your' body? I like the poem, but I think it needs a little more.

[allykat727]

I like what you've written. But I'm left with an unsatisfied feeling, because I don't know why you write those things. What's the reason for those things to happen to 'your' body? I like the poem, but I think it needs a little more.

Thanks volaticus! I agree, it definitely needs more. Thanks for the input

[qwerty_H]

I don't think it needs more, it is very nice the way it is. I love the part about a machine that runs on wood! Thanks.

-H

[allykat727]

I don't think it needs more, it is very nice the way it is. I love the part about a machine that runs on wood! Thanks.

-H

Cool! That is my favorite part, I'm glad you like it thanks