Shut off and locked away
I feel it smashing on that door
Every now and then a bit will come out
Now reminded, I search for more
But it seems to be a resource
That appears can not be renewed
Unless once more, it knocks on that door
And I answer in a certain mood.
This poem is on the verge of saying something important, but doesn't.
So the title makes sense.
But that's just how I feel. I need a drink.
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I must agree with rowens. It seems like there's a good idea behind, but it's not conveyed. You don't show what "it" is and what the door symbolizes.
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While what rowens and volaticus say is true, I like the fact that nothing is revealed. It seems like something that can mean different things to different people, and based on the mood you read it in. I feel it symbolizes emotion, and how we react to it, wether we lock it away, learn from it positively, or react to it negatively. This is just my opinion.
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(04-26-2013, 01:17 PM)Tksweck Wrote: Shut off and locked away
I feel it smashing on that door
Every now and then a bit will come out
Now reminded, I search for more
But it seems to be a resource
That appears can not be renewed
Unless once more, it knocks on that door
And I answer in a certain mood.
I like it. Title is perfect. I read the title and thought okay, some angsty poem from a kid, but there was thought behind this poem. Line 1 set it for me on my own personal level. The door I could imagine being my parents and me talking to them. Line 4/5 I feel like my parents are reminding me I can't do this, or that I have to do things this way, but I'm just a teenager, 18 and know everything. "A resource/ That appears cannot be renewed." It's like I'm learning, but not applying what I've learned. Until of course, none other than, my parents, knocking at my door... and I love the last line! "I answer in a certain mood." I love that. Perfect teenage angst... And it leads back to line 3 for me.
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First off, you don't have to be ashamed of having emotions. The title seems apologetic. Think about your feelings and try to conjure tactile sensations. What does your experience physically feel like? I'm not an accomplished poet but I would read up on some theory if you want to get serious about poetry. Good Luck.
