The Cemetery Plot

[xast]

an unseen voice, dictating the plot,
initially feint, growing in time,
life's only guidance,
can never let go, fresh out of options,
fueling mostly erratic delusions of a new reality,
sadly, too far gone the translation of life's official instruction manual,
remaining only happy memories of a person and life far gone,
yet briefly crack a smile, for at least a while,
pull back as the pain shows itself once more, realization hits
living by instruction of an intruder,
the voice, a total stranger, all that's left,
it's all him, dictating the role in the plot,
what and whoever it be, we'll have to wait and see,
if it takes it's toll so be it, together anything can be done,
partners forever this moment on
down to us, making a mark in history
be determined, part of the script,
it's an exciting new role,
a part to play, a position to fill, your final spot

the cemetery plot

[allykat727]

Cool piece! I thought was creative and unique and I especially liked how you ended it.

[Volaticus]

Nice title and poem. It might be easier to read, if you added some full stops, and edit out some of the words, as it gets a bit wordy. E.g. line 6: I like what it means, but it's quite a mouthful, and hard to read out loud.

[Ajax]

I would suggest adding in some periods and give the reader a break every once and a while. Besides that, I think it was a great read, love the last five lines.