(my mother - is formatting affecting or affectation?

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She
          (my mother
is not of softness but is of steel reinforced concrete.
she will give what she feels is deserved.
nevermore {beg if you like}
neverless
regardless of the cost to herself.

[ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] . . but deep, deep

as fair as rock is she.
her greetings are tolerations. her goodbyes, predictions
- of forseen failures.

[ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] . . still i seem to remember . .

a
* glimmer *
of a laugh, a
~whisper~
of a touch          so

[ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] very

[ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] long
­
[ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] ­ ago . . /


perhaps one day as she lies resting I will take my mothers hand
and kiss her upon her marble forehead
and speak "I love you mom"
and a single tear will drop from my face
onto her face
. . . and the coldness within her will bre-
[ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] [ind] ­ -ak


and my mother will break.

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so , whether you like the poem or not, does the formatting add or take away. Or is this just a bad example. What do you think?

[billy]

formatted poem need to be easy to follow or else the effort is wasted.

don't forget to give feedback elsewhere