Serenity By William Marsland.

[billy]

Dancing flippy-flop in the breeze
boughs of red-faced bougainvillea
delight a pastel orange day
and hide the stern grey palisade

Blues and white of trailing lobelia trickle
from broken-rimmed terracotta pots
to cover puddlesque, a corner of the courtyard
home to satin winged butterflies and bees

Warbler’s perched on tall bamboo grasses
chitter-chatter to yellow headed African marigolds
while giant sunflowers sway to unseen wind chimes
like entranced cobras dancing to the flute

The parasol casting just enough shade
for afternoon tea in an afternoon tea garden
served on a silver tray with strawberry filled scones
accompanied by the perfect music of a tinkling stream


the edited version; taking into account the feedback from post #2

Dancing flippy-flop in the breeze
boughs of red-faced bougainvillea
delight a pastel orange day
and hide the stern grey palisade

Blues and white of trailing lobelia trickle
from broken-rimmed terracotta pots
and puddle in the far corner of the courtyard
home to bees and satin winged butterflies

Warbler’s perched on tall bamboo grasses
chitter-chatter to yellow headed African marigolds
giant sunflowers standing proud above the herbs
sway comely to a melody of unseen wind chimes

The parasol casting just enough shade
for afternoon tea in an afternoon tea garden
served on a silver tray with strawberry filled scones
accompanied by the perfect music of a tinkling stream

[addy]

Not much to say on your rhythm and imagery... very good and very rich as usual . Just a few minor comments that might help, but really, I can't see much editing needed

Dancing flippy-flop in the breeze
boughs of red-faced bougainvillea
delight a pastel orange day
and hide the stern grey palisade

Blues and white of trailing lobelia trickle
from broken-rimmed terracotta pots
to cover puddlesque, hmm, guess it's up to up to you but don't particularly like "puddlesque", to me it sounds like a convoluted word a corner of the courtyard
home to satin winged butterflies and bees well bees don't have satiny wings I think, but that's just minor

Warbler’s perched on tall bamboo grasses
chitter-chatter to yellow headed African marigolds
while giant sunflowers sway to unseen wind chimes
like entranced cobras this line sticks out for me... it's accurate, but the impression it leaves is not particularly serene dancing to the flute

The parasol casting just enough shade
for afternoon tea in an afternoon tea garden
served on a silver tray with strawberry filled scones
accompanied by the perfect music of a tinkling stream

[billy]

Not much to say on your rhythm and imagery... very good and very rich as usual . Just a few minor comments that might help, but really, I can't see much editing needed

Dancing flippy-flop in the breeze
boughs of red-faced bougainvillea
delight a pastel orange day
and hide the stern grey palisade

Blues and white of trailing lobelia trickle
from broken-rimmed terracotta pots
to cover puddlesque, hmm, guess it's up to up to you but don't particularly like "puddlesque", to me it sounds like a convoluted word a corner of the courtyard
home to satin winged butterflies and bees well bees don't have satiny wings I think, but that's just minor

Warbler’s perched on tall bamboo grasses
chitter-chatter to yellow headed African marigolds
while giant sunflowers sway to unseen wind chimes
like entranced cobras this line sticks out for me... it's accurate, but the impression it leaves is not particularly serene dancing to the flute

The parasol casting just enough shade
for afternoon tea in an afternoon tea garden
served on a silver tray with strawberry filled scones
accompanied by the perfect music of a tinkling stream

food for thought addy.
and yep, puddlesque is convoluted i'll do an edit in a while and take into account your feedback. as always ; thanks