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Diabetes

Diabetes
UnicornRainbowCake Offline
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#1
04-03-2013, 05:51 AM
A needle a day
would never keep the doctors
away - inject more.
- Amy

(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)


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#2
04-03-2013, 08:59 AM
A needle a day
won't keep the doctors
at bay so prick away.
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#3
04-04-2013, 11:58 AM
In my opinion, they're both good Smile
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#4
09-22-2013, 03:52 AM
I like both versions as well, good work Thumbsup
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