Where I must be. Final edit. milo, trueenigma, billy

[tectak]

I need to be where buzzards broach the bosom bens,
peaks cupped in white lace kufi and pure as faith and prayer.
I need to feel the brittle breeze first numb my brow and then
upon my cheek, sharp needles shed from high, dry sticks;
I feel no pricks,
just pine scent in the gloaming air.

I need to be where snow-swans slide on silver trays,
in leaf-dark shaded water, ice glazed on sun-sweat days.
I need to drink fast streams that leach from bryophytic braes,
clear as poitin, peat-soft but strained through quartz and sand.
I sip the land,
as raindrops fling in Highland haze.

I need to be where sea sobs shore...
Where wild hart roar…
Where stars are crushed…
Where nights are hushed…
Where air is made…
Where time will fade.

I need to be
where I must be.

tectak
2013
Shieldaig

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I need to be where buzzards broach the bosom bens,
peaks cupped in white lace kufi and pure as faith and prayer.
I need to feel the brittle breeze first numb my brow and then
upon my cheek, sharp needles shed from high, dry sticks;
I feel no pricks,
just pine scent in the gloaming air.

I need to be where snow-swans slide on silver trays;
in leaf-dark shaded water, ice glazed on sun-sweat days.
I need to drink fast streams that leach from bryophytic braes;
clear as poitin, peat-soft but strained through quartz and sand.
I sip the land,
as raindrops fling in Highland haze.

I need to be where sea sobs shore...
Where wild hart roar…
Where stars are crushed…
Where nights are hushed…
Where air is made…
Where time will fade.

I need to be
where I must be.

tectak
2013
Shieldaig

Thanks to all for suggestions.....and milo, please note, S1 line 2. Peaks...NOT Beaks

[milo]

I need to be where buzzards broach the bosom bens,
peaks cupped in white lace kufi and pure as faith and prayer.
I need to feel the brittle breeze first numb my brow and then
upon my cheek, sharp needles shed from high, dry sticks;
I feel no pricks,
just pine scent in the gloaming air.

I need to be where snow-swans slide on silver trays;
in leaf-dark shaded water, ice glazed on sun-sweat days.
I need to drink fast streams that leach from bryophytic braes;
clear as poitin, peat-soft but strained through quartz and sand.
I sip the land,
as raindrops fling in Highland haze.

I need to be where sea sobs shore...
Where wild hart roar…
Where stars are crushed…
Where nights are hushed…
Where air is made…
Where time will fade.

I need to be
where I must be.

tectak
2013
Shieldaig

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I need to be where buzzards broach the bosom bens,
peaks cupped in white lace kufi and pure as faith and prayer.
I need to feel the brittle breeze first numb my brow and then
upon my cheek, sharp needles shed from high, dry sticks;
I feel no pricks,
just pine scent in the gloaming air.

I need to be where snow-swans slide on silver trays;
in leaf-dark shaded water, ice glazed on sun-sweat days.
I need to drink fast streams that leach from bryophytic braes;
clear as poitin, peat-soft but strained through quartz and sand.
I sip the land,
as raindrops fling in Highland haze.

I need to be where sea sobs shore...
Where wild hart roar…
Where stars are crushed…
Where nights are hushed…
Where air is made…
Where time will fade.

I need to be
where I must be.

tectak
2013
Shieldaig

Thanks to all for suggestions.....and milo, please note, S1 line 2. Peaks...NOT Beaks

yes, you adeptly took the hats off the buzzards which is good. I like all of the changes except "flings". Cliche or not, the dancing was still better reading, so . . .

milo

[Truerenigma]

Quote='milo' pid='122814' dateline='1365723608']

I need to be where buzzards broach the bosom bens,
peaks cupped in white lace kufi and pure as faith and prayer.
I need to feel the brittle breeze first numb my brow and then
upon my cheek, sharp needles shed from high, dry sticks;
I feel no pricks,
just pine scent in the gloaming air.

I need to be where snow-swans slide on silver trays;
in leaf-dark shaded water, ice glazed on sun-sweat days.
I need to drink fast streams that leach from bryophytic braes;
clear as poitin, peat-soft but strained through quartz and sand.
I sip the land,
as raindrops fling in Highland haze.

I need to be where sea sobs shore...
Where wild hart roar…
Where stars are crushed…
Where nights are hushed…
Where air is made…
Where time will fade.

I need to be
where I must be.

tectak
2013
Shieldaig

---

I need to be where buzzards broach the bosom bens,
peaks cupped in white lace kufi and pure as faith and prayer.
I need to feel the brittle breeze first numb my brow and then
upon my cheek, sharp needles shed from high, dry sticks;
I feel no pricks,
just pine scent in the gloaming air.

I need to be where snow-swans slide on silver trays;
in leaf-dark shaded water, ice glazed on sun-sweat days.
I need to drink fast streams that leach from bryophytic braes;
clear as poitin, peat-soft but strained through quartz and sand.
I sip the land,
as raindrops fling in Highland haze.

I need to be where sea sobs shore...
Where wild hart roar…
Where stars are crushed…
Where nights are hushed…
Where air is made…
Where time will fade.

I need to be
where I must be.

tectak
2013
Shieldaig

Thanks to all for suggestions.....and milo, please note, S1 line 2. Peaks...NOT Beaks

yes, you adeptly took the hats off the buzzards which is good. I like all of the changes except "flings". Cliche or not, the dancing was still better reading, so . . .

milo
[/quote]

I rather agree, Fling wouldn't be so bad if it Wasn't followed by 'in'---flingin highland haze. I keep thinking ' is fling from, or fling through better? But dance Isn't as bad. Whats wrong with:
I sip the land,
From raindrop springs in highland's haze
In raindrop sprinkled
In raindrop spattered
As raindrops fly through
In raindrop spraying
As raindrops spray from
In raindrop splashing
As raindrops splash in

I'm sorry.

[tectak]

Quote='milo' pid='122814' dateline='1365723608']

I need to be where buzzards broach the bosom bens,
peaks cupped in white lace kufi and pure as faith and prayer.
I need to feel the brittle breeze first numb my brow and then
upon my cheek, sharp needles shed from high, dry sticks;
I feel no pricks,
just pine scent in the gloaming air.

I need to be where snow-swans slide on silver trays;
in leaf-dark shaded water, ice glazed on sun-sweat days.
I need to drink fast streams that leach from bryophytic braes;
clear as poitin, peat-soft but strained through quartz and sand.
I sip the land,
as raindrops fling in Highland haze.

I need to be where sea sobs shore...
Where wild hart roar…
Where stars are crushed…
Where nights are hushed…
Where air is made…
Where time will fade.

I need to be
where I must be.

tectak
2013
Shieldaig

---

I need to be where buzzards broach the bosom bens,
peaks cupped in white lace kufi and pure as faith and prayer.
I need to feel the brittle breeze first numb my brow and then
upon my cheek, sharp needles shed from high, dry sticks;
I feel no pricks,
just pine scent in the gloaming air.

I need to be where snow-swans slide on silver trays;
in leaf-dark shaded water, ice glazed on sun-sweat days.
I need to drink fast streams that leach from bryophytic braes;
clear as poitin, peat-soft but strained through quartz and sand.
I sip the land,
as raindrops fling in Highland haze.

I need to be where sea sobs shore...
Where wild hart roar…
Where stars are crushed…
Where nights are hushed…
Where air is made…
Where time will fade.

I need to be
where I must be.

tectak
2013
Shieldaig

Thanks to all for suggestions.....and milo, please note, S1 line 2. Peaks...NOT Beaks

yes, you adeptly took the hats off the buzzards which is good. I like all of the changes except "flings". Cliche or not, the dancing was still better reading, so . . .

milo

I rather agree, Fling wouldn't be so bad if it Wasn't followed by 'in'---flingin highland haze. I keep thinking ' is fling from, or fling through better? But dance Isn't as bad. Whats wrong with:
I sip the land,
From raindrop springs in highland's haze
In raindrop sprinkled
In raindrop spattered
As raindrops fly through
In raindrop spraying
As raindrops spray from
In raindrop splashing
As raindrops splash in

I'm sorry.
[/quote]
Thanks both....but google Highland Fling. then still say dance is better!
I may be too peurile...dance may win.
Best,
tectak

[milo]

Quote='milo' pid='122814' dateline='1365723608']

I need to be where buzzards broach the bosom bens,
peaks cupped in white lace kufi and pure as faith and prayer.
I need to feel the brittle breeze first numb my brow and then
upon my cheek, sharp needles shed from high, dry sticks;
I feel no pricks,
just pine scent in the gloaming air.

I need to be where snow-swans slide on silver trays;
in leaf-dark shaded water, ice glazed on sun-sweat days.
I need to drink fast streams that leach from bryophytic braes;
clear as poitin, peat-soft but strained through quartz and sand.
I sip the land,
as raindrops fling in Highland haze.

I need to be where sea sobs shore...
Where wild hart roar…
Where stars are crushed…
Where nights are hushed…
Where air is made…
Where time will fade.

I need to be
where I must be.

tectak
2013
Shieldaig

---

Thanks to all for suggestions.....and milo, please note, S1 line 2. Peaks...NOT Beaks

yes, you adeptly took the hats off the buzzards which is good. I like all of the changes except "flings". Cliche or not, the dancing was still better reading, so . . .

milo

I rather agree, Fling wouldn't be so bad if it Wasn't followed by 'in'---flingin highland haze. I keep thinking ' is fling from, or fling through better? But dance Isn't as bad. Whats wrong with:
I sip the land,
From raindrop springs in highland's haze
In raindrop sprinkled
In raindrop spattered
As raindrops fly through
In raindrop spraying
As raindrops spray from
In raindrop splashing
As raindrops splash in

I'm sorry.

Thanks both....but google Highland Fling. then still say dance is better!
I may be too peurile...dance may win.
Best,
tectak
[/quote]

maybe there is a third option . . .

[Crepuscule]

Quote='milo' pid='122814' dateline='1365723608']

yes, you adeptly took the hats off the buzzards which is good. I like all of the changes except "flings". Cliche or not, the dancing was still better reading, so . . .

milo

I rather agree, Fling wouldn't be so bad if it Wasn't followed by 'in'---flingin highland haze. I keep thinking ' is fling from, or fling through better? But dance Isn't as bad. Whats wrong with:
I sip the land,
From raindrop springs in highland's haze
In raindrop sprinkled
In raindrop spattered
As raindrops fly through
In raindrop spraying
As raindrops spray from
In raindrop splashing
As raindrops splash in

I'm sorry.

Thanks both....but google Highland Fling. then still say dance is better!
I may be too peurile...dance may win.
Best,
tectak

maybe there is a third option . . .
[/quote]

If the Highland Fling was a magazine, it would be on the top shelf of the "Dated Cultural Stereotypes" section in WH Smiths next to the "Russ Abbott Gazette".

How about "Reel". It's about the only one of the non-joke Scottish dances that would fit (the others being "Strathspey" and "Jig"). "Ceilidh" even?

[tectak]

I rather agree, Fling wouldn't be so bad if it Wasn't followed by 'in'---flingin highland haze. I keep thinking ' is fling from, or fling through better? But dance Isn't as bad. Whats wrong with:
I sip the land,
From raindrop springs in highland's haze
In raindrop sprinkled
In raindrop spattered
As raindrops fly through
In raindrop spraying
As raindrops spray from
In raindrop splashing
As raindrops splash in

I'm sorry.

Thanks both....but google Highland Fling. then still say dance is better!
I may be too peurile...dance may win.
Best,
tectak

maybe there is a third option . . .

If the Highland Fling was a magazine, it would be on the top shelf of the "Dated Cultural Stereotypes" section in WH Smiths next to the "Russ Abbott Gazette".

How about "Reel". It's about the only one of the non-joke Scottish dances that would fit (the others being "Strathspey" and "Jig"). "Ceilidh" even?
[/quote]
So "fling" works for you, then?
Is reel the third option?
Shall we dance?
Best,
tecmactak

[milo]

Thanks both....but google Highland Fling. then still say dance is better!
I may be too peurile...dance may win.
Best,
tectak

maybe there is a third option . . .

If the Highland Fling was a magazine, it would be on the top shelf of the "Dated Cultural Stereotypes" section in WH Smiths next to the "Russ Abbott Gazette".

How about "Reel". It's about the only one of the non-joke Scottish dances that would fit (the others being "Strathspey" and "Jig"). "Ceilidh" even?

So "fling" works for you, then?
Is reel the third option?
Shall we dance?
Best,
tecmactak
[/quote]

reel does not work, dont fall for it

[tectak]

I rather agree, Fling wouldn't be so bad if it Wasn't followed by 'in'---flingin highland haze. I keep thinking ' is fling from, or fling through better? But dance Isn't as bad. Whats wrong with:
I sip the land,
From raindrop springs in highland's haze
In raindrop sprinkled
In raindrop spattered
As raindrops fly through
In raindrop spraying
As raindrops spray from
In raindrop splashing
As raindrops splash in

I'm sorry.

Thanks both....but google Highland Fling. then still say dance is better!
I may be too peurile...dance may win.
Best,
tectak

maybe there is a third option . . .

If the Highland Fling was a magazine, it would be on the top shelf of the "Dated Cultural Stereotypes" section in WH Smiths next to the "Russ Abbott Gazette".

How about "Reel". It's about the only one of the non-joke Scottish dances that would fit (the others being "Strathspey" and "Jig"). "Ceilidh" even?
[/quote]

For the Northern Highlands Regional High School newspaper see The Highland Fling For the famous NZ trotter see Highland Fling (horse) The Highland Fling is one of the oldest [citation needed] of the Highland dances that originated in the Gaelic Highlands of Scotland. Returning from a victorious battle, male warriors would perform the dance in celebration of their success [citationneeded] . It was performed on a small round shield, called a targe [citation needed] . Most targes had a sharp spike of steel projecting from the centre, so the dancers learned to move with skill and dexterity to avoid injuring themselves [citation needed] .

This dance is now performed at dance competitions and events around the world. It is no longer danced on a shield, but it is still the goal of the dancer to stay in the same spot throughout the dance. The Highland Fling is danced at almost all competition levels, from Primary to Premier. It is also performed for most Highland and Theory examinations. Dancers wear the standard kilt outfit to perform this dance. It is in 4/4 time.

The Highland Fling is referenced in the lyrics of Harlem hot jazz musician Harry Gibson's 1947 hit, "Who put the Benzedrine in Mrs. Murphy's Ovaltine?"

[Crepuscule]

Thanks both....but google Highland Fling. then still say dance is better!
I may be too peurile...dance may win.
Best,
tectak

maybe there is a third option . . .

If the Highland Fling was a magazine, it would be on the top shelf of the "Dated Cultural Stereotypes" section in WH Smiths next to the "Russ Abbott Gazette".

How about "Reel". It's about the only one of the non-joke Scottish dances that would fit (the others being "Strathspey" and "Jig"). "Ceilidh" even?

For the Northern Highlands Regional High School newspaper see The Highland Fling For the famous NZ trotter see Highland Fling (horse) The Highland Fling is one of the oldest [citation needed] of the Highland dances that originated in the Gaelic Highlands of Scotland. Returning from a victorious battle, male warriors would perform the dance in celebration of their success [citationneeded] . It was performed on a small round shield, called a targe [citation needed] . Most targes had a sharp spike of steel projecting from the centre, so the dancers learned to move with skill and dexterity to avoid injuring themselves [citation needed] .

This dance is now performed at dance competitions and events around the world. It is no longer danced on a shield, but it is still the goal of the dancer to stay in the same spot throughout the dance. The Highland Fling is danced at almost all competition levels, from Primary to Premier. It is also performed for most Highland and Theory examinations. Dancers wear the standard kilt outfit to perform this dance. It is in 4/4 time.

The Highland Fling is referenced in the lyrics of Harlem hot jazz musician Harry Gibson's 1947 hit, "Who put the Benzedrine in Mrs. Murphy's Ovaltine?"

Yep, Wikipedia at its best.

[tectak]

If the Highland Fling was a magazine, it would be on the top shelf of the "Dated Cultural Stereotypes" section in WH Smiths next to the "Russ Abbott Gazette".

How about "Reel". It's about the only one of the non-joke Scottish dances that would fit (the others being "Strathspey" and "Jig"). "Ceilidh" even?

For the Northern Highlands Regional High School newspaper see The Highland Fling For the famous NZ trotter see Highland Fling (horse) The Highland Fling is one of the oldest [citation needed] of the Highland dances that originated in the Gaelic Highlands of Scotland. Returning from a victorious battle, male warriors would perform the dance in celebration of their success [citationneeded] . It was performed on a small round shield, called a targe [citation needed] . Most targes had a sharp spike of steel projecting from the centre, so the dancers learned to move with skill and dexterity to avoid injuring themselves [citation needed] .

This dance is now performed at dance competitions and events around the world. It is no longer danced on a shield, but it is still the goal of the dancer to stay in the same spot throughout the dance. The Highland Fling is danced at almost all competition levels, from Primary to Premier. It is also performed for most Highland and Theory examinations. Dancers wear the standard kilt outfit to perform this dance. It is in 4/4 time.

The Highland Fling is referenced in the lyrics of Harlem hot jazz musician Harry Gibson's 1947 hit, "Who put the Benzedrine in Mrs. Murphy's Ovaltine?"

Yep, Wikipedia at its best.

So it bloody well should be....I wrote part of it!!! Is it wrong?
Best,
tectak

[Truerenigma]

Thanks both....but google Highland Fling. then still say dance is better!
I may be too peurile...dance may win.
Best,
tectak

maybe there is a third option . . .

If the Highland Fling was a magazine, it would be on the top shelf of the "Dated Cultural Stereotypes" section in WH Smiths next to the "Russ Abbott Gazette".

How about "Reel". It's about the only one of the non-joke Scottish dances that would fit (the others being "Strathspey" and "Jig"). "Ceilidh" even?

For the Northern Highlands Regional High School newspaper see The Highland Fling For the famous NZ trotter see Highland Fling (horse) The Highland Fling is one of the oldest [citation needed] of the Highland dances that originated in the Gaelic Highlands of Scotland. Returning from a victorious battle, male warriors would perform the dance in celebration of their success [citationneeded] . It was performed on a small round shield, called a targe [citation needed] . Most targes had a sharp spike of steel projecting from the centre, so the dancers learned to move with skill and dexterity to avoid injuring themselves [citation needed] .

This dance is now performed at dance competitions and events around the world. It is no longer danced on a shield, but it is still the goal of the dancer to stay in the same spot throughout the dance. The Highland Fling is danced at almost all competition levels, from Primary to Premier. It is also performed for most Highland and Theory examinations. Dancers wear the standard kilt outfit to perform this dance. It is in 4/4 time.

The Highland Fling is referenced in the lyrics of Harlem hot jazz musician Harry Gibson's 1947 hit, "Who put the Benzedrine in Mrs. Murphy's Ovaltine?"
[/quote]

More Ovaltine please!

[tectak]

maybe there is a third option . . .

If the Highland Fling was a magazine, it would be on the top shelf of the "Dated Cultural Stereotypes" section in WH Smiths next to the "Russ Abbott Gazette".

How about "Reel". It's about the only one of the non-joke Scottish dances that would fit (the others being "Strathspey" and "Jig"). "Ceilidh" even?

For the Northern Highlands Regional High School newspaper see The Highland Fling For the famous NZ trotter see Highland Fling (horse) The Highland Fling is one of the oldest [citation needed] of the Highland dances that originated in the Gaelic Highlands of Scotland. Returning from a victorious battle, male warriors would perform the dance in celebration of their success [citationneeded] . It was performed on a small round shield, called a targe [citation needed] . Most targes had a sharp spike of steel projecting from the centre, so the dancers learned to move with skill and dexterity to avoid injuring themselves [citation needed] .

This dance is now performed at dance competitions and events around the world. It is no longer danced on a shield, but it is still the goal of the dancer to stay in the same spot throughout the dance. The Highland Fling is danced at almost all competition levels, from Primary to Premier. It is also performed for most Highland and Theory examinations. Dancers wear the standard kilt outfit to perform this dance. It is in 4/4 time.

The Highland Fling is referenced in the lyrics of Harlem hot jazz musician Harry Gibson's 1947 hit, "Who put the Benzedrine in Mrs. Murphy's Ovaltine?"

More Ovaltine please!
[/quote]

Cummin' right up! Benzedrine, sir? One lump or two?

[Pigalo]

Your poem demonstrates beautiful craftsmanship. I found a pleasurable balance between the concrete and the abstract.

Thank you.

[tectak]

[quote='Pigalo' pid='123017' dateline='1365880908']
Your poem demonstrates beautiful craftsmanship. I found a pleasurable balance between the concrete and the abstract.

Thank you.


...and thank you, too. Do you have any suggestions where it could be improved?
Best,
tectak