An Object (short poem)

[Jae Mc Donnell]

Recently I found an object that speaks in volumes
When I open it, it goes silent
If I show it to friends, they laugh
If I hide it, it wallows and cries
In the cold light of understanding
Its surface shows my reflection
The object: Me

[NakedBear]

Recently I found an object that speaks in volumes
When I open it, it goes silent
If I show it to friends, they laugh
If I hide it, it wallows and cries
In the cold light of understanding
Its surface shows my reflection
The object: Me

Hey. Glad you've finally found yourself.

The second to last line might be fun if the "my" is replaced with "its".

I'm guessing the whole thing is meant as a riddle. Maybe you could re-work it as an actual riddle? Of course, you'll have to add a bit so the reader has a hope of solving it.

Mikey.

[Volaticus]

Hi,
I liked this one But I also noticed, that in L6, maybe you should replace "my" with "its". And with the poem being kind of a riddle, I would suggest maybe removing the last line, or reworking it a bit.

- Volaticus

[IdiomsNCliches]

I agree that the last line should just be left off. Leave some room for discussion about what the object is.

Without that line, I would've spent some time trying to figure it out. It's well written otherwise!