Norma

[Keith]

The carpet kissed her shoes and lips,
should have known, that as she slipped
into the light, cameras would caress
beneath, her now transparent dress.
a nation shared the sensation.

Pubescent face pressed to the screen,
whispered words he'd only dreamed.
She flicked her hair then tripped along,
Champagne waves broke on her tongue,
laughter’s plight, held it's self at night.

As we peered through the hour-glass
she took her last, the pain half mast,
Grotesque, undressed, bulbs still flashed.

[Heartafire]

The carpet matched her shoe’s and lips,
couldn’t have know that as she slipped
into the light, cameras and cathodes would take a breath,
caress beneath, her now transparent dress.

A million faces pressed to the screens,
whispered words in bedroom dreams.
Men of cloth knelt down in prayer,
then uttered words they’d never dare.

She flicked her hair then went along,
champagne bubbles burst on her tongue,
laughter’s plight,
held itself at night.

As we peered through hour and glass
she took her last, pain passed,
flag half mast.
Grotesque, undressed, bulbs still flashed.

I am moved by this poem about Marilyn. Beneath the transparent dress an exploited human being. Wonderfully descriptive writing, I might forgo "bubbles" S3l2. Enjoyed this sad homage to Norma Jean.
My best,
Heart

[Keith]

The carpet matched her shoe’s and lips,
couldn’t have know that as she slipped
into the light, cameras and cathodes would take a breath,
caress beneath, her now transparent dress.

A million faces pressed to the screens,
whispered words in bedroom dreams.
Men of cloth knelt down in prayer,
then uttered words they’d never dare.

She flicked her hair then went along,
champagne bubbles burst on her tongue,
laughter’s plight,
held itself at night.

As we peered through hour and glass
she took her last, pain passed,
flag half mast.
Grotesque, undressed, bulbs still flashed.

I am moved by this poem about Marilyn. Beneath the transparent dress an exploited human being. Wonderfully descriptive writing, I might forgo "bubbles" S3l2. Enjoyed this sad homage to Norma Jean.
My best,
Heart

Many thanks Heart for the kind words I have had an edit to try and improve the scan, cheers TOMH

[newsclippings]

Goodbye Norma Jean!

(the only song I like better by Sir Elton is Tiny Dancer)

[Keith]

Goodbye Norma Jean!

(the only song I like better by Sir Elton is Tiny Dancer)

Song for guy or rocket man

[milo]

The carpet kissed her shoes and lips,
should have known, that as she slipped
into the light, cameras would caress
beneath, her now transparent dress.
a nation shared the sensation.

Pubescent face pressed to the screen,
whispered words he'd only dreamed.
She flicked her hair then tripped along,
Champagne waves broke on her tongue,
laughter’s plight, held it's self at night.

As we peered through the hour-glass
she took her last, the pain half mast,
Grotesque, undressed, bulbs still flashed.

You could easily fix up the meter as so:


The carpet kissed her shoes and lips,
we should have known, that as she slipped
into the light cameras' caress
beneath her now transparent dress.
A nation shared the rogue sensation.

Pubescent face pressed to the screen,
It whispered words he'd only dreamed.
She flicked her hair then tripped along,
The Champagne waves broke on her tongue,
her laughter’s plight, was held at night.

As we observed the hour-glass
she took her last, the pain half mast,
Grotesque, undressed, the bulbs still flashed.

of course I ellided cameras but I think that is common, if it jerks for you just remove "light" as it doesn't really add anything anyway.. There are some other issues with pronoun confusions and abruptly shifting thought train that don't really help this but the meter, at least, is easily fixed.

-milo

[Keith]

The carpet kissed her shoes and lips,
should have known, that as she slipped
into the light, cameras would caress
beneath, her now transparent dress.
a nation shared the sensation.

Pubescent face pressed to the screen,
whispered words he'd only dreamed.
She flicked her hair then tripped along,
Champagne waves broke on her tongue,
laughter’s plight, held it's self at night.

As we peered through the hour-glass
she took her last, the pain half mast,
Grotesque, undressed, bulbs still flashed.

You could easily fix up the meter as so:


The carpet kissed her shoes and lips,
we should have known, that as she slipped
into the light cameras' caress
beneath her now transparent dress.
A nation shared the rogue sensation.

Pubescent face pressed to the screen,
It whispered words he'd only dreamed.
She flicked her hair then tripped along,
The Champagne waves broke on her tongue,
her laughter’s plight, was held at night.

As we observed the hour-glass
she took her last, the pain half mast,
Grotesque, undressed, the bulbs still flashed.

of course I ellided cameras but I think that is common, if it jerks for you just remove "light" as it doesn't really add anything anyway.. There are some other issues with pronoun confusions and abruptly shifting thought train that don't really help this but the meter, at least, is easily fixed.

-milo

Hi Milo
Thank you very much for taking time to work on the meter all very much appreciate, I will consider all your point in the edit.
Cheers TOMH