Gone but not forgotten

[Kelseymclemore]

I gave him this coin, told him never to forget.
He gave it right back, said he didn't need it.
He could remember it all,
from the think to the thin,
the good to the bad,
the start to the end.
Forced to keep this coin, I see it from time to time.
It reminds me of his memory,
so sweet and devine.
Sometimes I find my self picking it up,
holding it tight, and wishing him luck.

[Jae Mc Donnell]

Hi Kelseymclemore, and welcome.
For me the poem is nice. Not lots going on and a bit cliché. But I don't care, It's nice,and I'm fine with that

I gave him this coin, told him never to forget. Maybe a comma after told him or quotation marks around never forget and lose to
He gave it right back, said he didn't need it.
He could remember it all,
from the think to the thin, lose first the
the good to the bad,
the start to the end. change the to and
Forced to keep this coin, I see it from time to time. Put two parts on seperate lines smae with first and second line
It reminds me of his memory,
so sweet and devine.
Sometimes I find my self picking it up,
holding it tight, and wishing him luck. I like the end, nice.

I hope this helps

[brandontoh]

I gave him this coin, told him never to forget.
He gave it right back, said he didn't need it.
He could remember it all,
from the think to the thin, -- Thick?
the good to the bad,
the start to the end. -- These 3 lines are a little too cliche for me. The idea of time and the gamut of emotions is not carried over well I think.
Forced to keep this coin, I see it from time to time. -- This is where I'd start a new stanza, so it's easier to digest for the readers, and the difference between flashback and present will be clearer.
It reminds me of his memory,
so sweet and devine. -- Divine?
Sometimes I find my self picking it up,
holding it tight, and wishing him luck. -- These last 2 lines are great. A strong imagery is presented, and they're the best lines in the poem.

Overall, this poem has potential. I can see it being more powerful with the appropriate rewording and introduction of stronger imageries. Remember that my feedback is my own personal opinion, so do ponder upon them, but know that they're not forced onto you. Hope I'm of help! =)