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I'm writing poetry.
I should be doing laundry.
I'm writing poetry,
As a convenient excuse
To delay laundry.
After all, I'm still being productive.
But when all is said and done,
I should be doing laundry.
If not, my mum will be reprimanding.
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Haha, this one definitely rings true!
I could procrastinate at Olympic level... I'll go for the tryouts one day...
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(01-28-2013, 04:06 PM)Leanne Wrote: Haha, this one definitely rings true!
I could procrastinate at Olympic level... I'll go for the tryouts one day...
But you procrastinate so much, by the time you go for the tryouts they're already over.
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I don't think the last line is needed. It brings in an element of consequence which breaks the amusing mood of indifference you've established. It's a funny, charming poem. I used to write poems like this a lot. I still do when I can't think of any "big" theme or just feel especially nihilistic for some reason. Thank you for the read
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(01-28-2013, 03:59 PM)brandontoh Wrote: I'm writing poetry.
I should be doing laundry.
I'm writing poetry,
As a convenient excuse
To delay laundry.
After all, I'm still being productive.
But when all is said and done,
I should be doing laundry.
If not, my mum will be reprimanding.
get the effin laundry done
thanks for the smile.
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Thanks Hes, for the feedback.
You're welcome Billy. And laundry needs to be done everyday, which I do, so I should reward myself with a cookie.
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