Things to do instead of smoking cigarettes:
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Chew gum
Chew toothpicks
Chew pencils
Bite mints
Bite lips
Bite fingernails
Lick envelopes
Lick ice cream cones
Lick papercuts
Drink coffee
Drink diet coke
Drink cheap rum
Suck lolipops
Suck milkshake straws
Suck...lolipops.
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#2
...smoke a pipe
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#3
The ellipses at the end was hilarious.
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson
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#4
you should give up, unless you want to take poetry seriously... this is the worst poem i have ever read ever.
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(02-02-2013, 07:50 AM)shemthepenman Wrote:  you should give up, unless you want to take poetry seriously... this is the worst poem i have ever read ever.

gee thanks. next time i'll know that the "poetry for fun" forum isn't really for fun. and it's all because of your helpful comment, dear sir. Big Grin
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#6
Got to take the bad with the good. Trust me, if that's the worst criticism you ever receive you can count yourself either lucky or dead.
It could be worse
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#7
One site I went on hated my poems so much they made it where I was unable to post. When I was a teenager, I wrote something to a girl, and she called the police.
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#8
Haha,
I liked it (despite shem)

Drink cheap rum

ya!

I still smoke but I take your advice. ;-)

cheers
Serge
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(02-02-2013, 07:50 AM)shemthepenman Wrote:  you should give up, unless you want to take poetry seriously... this is the worst poem i have ever read ever.

Then thank heavens it received the worst comment ever! I do love consistency.
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe
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#10
;-)

it is the fun department after all.
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#11
this is the for fun forum
phrases like, this is the worst poem i've ever read don't do anyone any good/admin

like todd said, the last line is funny enough to crack a smile.
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(02-02-2013, 09:05 AM)rowens Wrote:  One site I went on hated my poems so much they made it where I was unable to post. When I was a teenager, I wrote something to a girl, and she called the police.

definitely impressed here. Must try harder. ;-)
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