My Unspoken Love

[Jagger Cyde]

My unspoken love
Full of fear
My unspoken love
Draws near

Does she know her beauty?
Oh, what it can do
Take my breath away
Keep my voice too quiet to hear

Lost in the hypnotic glow of her eyes
I lose my sense of surroundings
Forever here I could stay
Alone
Just you and I

I want to talk
But the silence is too glorious
I want you to know
What exactly you do to me

Not wanting a missed chance
Nor a wrecked dance
I can't bring myself to do it
Maybe tomorrow will be my day

My unspoken love
Full of doubt
My unspoken love
Forever silent

[rowens]

If you smoothed out lines like


"Forever here I could stay"


And maybe spent a little more time playing around with ideas here, it could approve.

But so far, it's ok. Ok, but could be better. Depends on what you want to do.