Depression
#1
i creep into sleep cracks contaminate and then sneak back
destroy the puny minds of weak macks and repeat that
personified by the sleak black no soul thats a key fact
prozac to stop me? no doc you can keep that
im here to do a job sometimes its monotonous
hung ropes, sliced throats, watching teenagers cut wrists
im the black hole in ya heart come on and stop this
watch this, the silent kid in your class is making a hit list
cuz you called him a dumb bitch your the cause of the arm stitch
when you hear the bomb tick now who's the real bitch
Isn't It Evil to Live Backwards~Loaded Lux


I'm Batman, act up and I'll squeeze Hecklers/You'll die before the first clip drops, Heath Ledger!
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#2
You going to perform this out loud? Maybe stick on here?
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#3
maybe
Isn't It Evil to Live Backwards~Loaded Lux


I'm Batman, act up and I'll squeeze Hecklers/You'll die before the first clip drops, Heath Ledger!
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#4
I really enjoyed this, the way the rhyme rolls around made it a lot of fun to read (quite a heavy topic though).
The rhyme was quite rap-like, I can imagine it would perform well.

Cheers,
BTJ
If something happens and you can remedy it, Why worry?
And if something happens that you can't remedy, Still why worry?

www.benjack.co.nz
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#5
this was a really heavy piece. The diction and vocabulary hold great weight in the poem's mood. good job! And I also agree with the nice way the rhymes flow. Love it!
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