The Ocean's Tide

[DaedricPrince]

Beauty and harmony.
The colors rise, and the light shines.
For the blue sight, reins at flight.
Now the dark tides grow. Roaring at night.
Following upon the misty frights,
All will flee faster than light.
Destroying all dignity, and shading of insanity,
Igniting a world filled with anxiety.
Further on the misty waves, the dark of night shuts down in misery.
Finally, the bright beauty climbs to harmony.
Whereas the evil sky flees away for eternity.
...
The colors rise, and light shines.
For the blue sight, reins at flight.

[arbil_poieo]

Hey DaedricPrince,

You have some good lines here.

I don't think you need "beauty and harmony" they're already implied throughout the poem.
"The colors rise, and the light shines"--can you describe the color, for this image? It would help the reader to understand this better.
"Now the dark tides grow. Roaring at night"---I enjoy this shift of "good to bad" and the idea, I think this can be described better, what kind of roar and from where?
"Following upon the misty frights"---I like the image of misty frights, it lets my mind wander a bit
"All will flee faster than light"---faster than light is a cliche
"shading of insanity"---love that very much!
"Further on the misty waves, the dark of night shuts down in misery"---This is a rather long line, I think you just need "the dark of night shuts down in misery"
"Finally, the bright beauty climbs to harmony"---I like the image of beauty climbing to harmony, brilliant!
"Wheras the evil sky flees away for eternity"---I think a better way to describe the sky other than "evil" would be better, it doesn't add anything, I like the thought of this it just needs to be explained better.

Overall, I like where this is going, there are some good images to work with and some that need to be added for the reader's benefit.