An Endless Love

[DarlingNumber9]

An endless love,
A perfect pitch.
Who would think,
Something'd miss?

On his neck,
A purple bruise,
Who but me,
To accuse?

My future in-law,
Dreaded the more,
Must scream in her mind,
"That skank, the whore."

I am, I am.
I accept the blame.
Don't forgive me.
I deserve the shame.

I thought it'd be cute,
A mark of love.
But my bullet,
Has shot our dove.

An endless love,
A perfect pitch,
Tainted by,
My selfish lips.

-DN9

[arbil_poieo]

Welcome DN9!
While reading this I couldn't help but to think of a song Endless Love a duet by Lionel Richie and Diana Ross.

"I thought its be cute" did you mean "I thought it'll be cute"
"Something'd"- something's
Just minor typos

This seems tight, that are no long lines with a lot of words that are not necessary---very good!

I wonder if maybe you could experiement a little with some images that connect to the emotions.
Example:"must scream in her mind" describe it further, play with it like "must screech forms her mind" Just play with this a little and do what ever you're most comfortable with.

I like this, it has guilt but yet innocence to this. I believe most parents feel that their kids are dating a bad influence even if it isn't true. The words have captured the story well enough, it just needs some images.

[brandontoh]

Hi! It's a short and sweet poem. I like how the whole poem feels a little tongue-in-cheek, but personally I think you could try to introduce some more emotional aspects to it, to give it a little more impact. As it stands, it works well, but given the context of it, more emotions would enable the readers to relate to it better.

For example, in the penultimate stanza,

I thought it's be cute,
A mark of love.
But my bullet,
Has shot our dove.

By changing a few words here and there, more powerful, intense words, you can introduce the emotions of anger:

I thought it's cute,
Our mark of love.
But the bullet,
Killed our dove.

Of course, it doesn't have to be anger; any emotions you think is fitting can be introduced, as long as you use the right words.

[DarlingNumber9]

Thanks for the greetings. And thank you for catching the typo, it's fixed now. Thank you for the thought and praise, I really appreciate it.