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In South Carolina,
it's how fast
you can go.
Like the speed
limit, no one cares
if there are no cops
watching.
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson
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How true
Especially so for the younger generation crime or a sin is only such if it is witnessed or caught.
(oh no I'm sounding like a grumpy old woman...oh well I'm 50 in a couple of years....I might as well start practicing spitting and swearing to get in some practice and I already think I look good in purple!)
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Funny and short as it is, this feels like a poem which would do well in the actual critique sections. It's humour is bitter and moralistic, and in its free verse way it's beautifully arranged. Thank you for the read
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe
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Life in the fast lane, Heslopian has the words, I've come back to this a few times, because I enjoy it.
If your undies fer you've been smoking through em, don't peg em out
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12-19-2012, 11:33 AM
(This post was last modified: 12-19-2012, 11:34 AM by Todd.)
Thank you all (cider, jack, ToMH), I appreciate the comments. Maybe I will move this one day to a critique forum.
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson